Rooted in Dixie
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Overcoming Fear"My early life and Southern roots
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Comment from w.j.debi
I like how you show overcoming some fears, and simply making it through others by surviving the situation as well as you could. You're correct that your experiences prepared you for life ahead. Well told. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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I like how you show overcoming some fears, and simply making it through others by surviving the situation as well as you could. You're correct that your experiences prepared you for life ahead. Well told. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much for the excellent review. I enjoyed your comments and good wishes.
Comment from Terry Broxson
This is a wonderfully written story. I found myself rooting for you in every adventure. Ms. Edwards was indeed special. Exceptional stuff! Good luck.Terry
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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This is a wonderfully written story. I found myself rooting for you in every adventure. Ms. Edwards was indeed special. Exceptional stuff! Good luck.Terry
Comment Written 02-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Thank you Terry. I really appreciate your review and affirming words. I'm thrilled with the six stars.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
From a mother's perspective, I once saw a group of high school kids sledding together while I was with my son, who may have been 10. I remember going home and telling my husband, "I don't want one of those!" He said, "Too late, we have a son and he will be that age one day." It turned out just fine.
You are exactly right - high school is a training ground for life. And as nervous and stressed as we are sometimes, it always seems to work out.
This was an interesting story about your fears and how you overcame them. Clever idea about dropping the paper on the floor for Ms. Edwards to see.
Good luck in the contest.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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From a mother's perspective, I once saw a group of high school kids sledding together while I was with my son, who may have been 10. I remember going home and telling my husband, "I don't want one of those!" He said, "Too late, we have a son and he will be that age one day." It turned out just fine.
You are exactly right - high school is a training ground for life. And as nervous and stressed as we are sometimes, it always seems to work out.
This was an interesting story about your fears and how you overcame them. Clever idea about dropping the paper on the floor for Ms. Edwards to see.
Good luck in the contest.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 02-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Thank you Pam. I appreciate the review and comments. It is true that most of the thing we worry about not being able to deal with work out just fine.
Beth
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is a very well expressed story about your high school memories. I knew I would be intrigued from the title and, sure enough, you didn't disappoint with your personal journey through this difficult stage in your life. I like the way you have elaborated so well on your message that "High school is just a training ground for life." Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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This is a very well expressed story about your high school memories. I knew I would be intrigued from the title and, sure enough, you didn't disappoint with your personal journey through this difficult stage in your life. I like the way you have elaborated so well on your message that "High school is just a training ground for life." Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 02-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much Debbie, I really appreciate the review and I 'm happy it didn't disappoint you.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
My mind was busy creating new things to worry about. - I can relate to that.
Wow you certainly had interesting high school years once Ms Edwards found out about your art talent. A great read, well told. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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My mind was busy creating new things to worry about. - I can relate to that.
Wow you certainly had interesting high school years once Ms Edwards found out about your art talent. A great read, well told. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much, Pearl. I enjoyed your comments and I appreciate the review. Especially the six stars.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This story is very well written, and captivates the reader from the beginning. The thoughts and feelings you mentioned as a young teen probably resonates with many people. New surroundings, students, and teachers can be terrifying. You did an excellent job with descriptions and pacing. In the end, you gave a meaningful summary of what your experiences taught you. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2023
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This story is very well written, and captivates the reader from the beginning. The thoughts and feelings you mentioned as a young teen probably resonates with many people. New surroundings, students, and teachers can be terrifying. You did an excellent job with descriptions and pacing. In the end, you gave a meaningful summary of what your experiences taught you. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2023
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Thank you for an excellent review. I appreciate you comments.
Comment from royowen
The beauty of youth is that it's a training ground for the real event, handling the rigours that come in those latter years of adulthood, the real event, it either drives us into reclusiveness and escape, or we stand and take our rightful place in life. Beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2023
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The beauty of youth is that it's a training ground for the real event, handling the rigours that come in those latter years of adulthood, the real event, it either drives us into reclusiveness and escape, or we stand and take our rightful place in life. Beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 01-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2023
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Thank you for an excellent review. I guess it is normal to feel a little unsettled about new situations. We tend to think it is just who feels the stress not realizing we're not that different from everyone else.
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Comment from Daylily
Fear of the unknown can become very debilitating.
I like how your story unfolds and ends with an excellent summation.
The art portion towards the end was particularly interesting as I enjoy doing artwork, too.
I'm glad you have shared this part of your life.
Notes:
The wording here causes a weak sentence:
The possibility of that happening to me, had caused a sleepless night.
Changing it a little creates more power:
The possibility of that happening to me resulted in a sleepless night.
Another area to watch for is unnecessary wordings. Such as:
"Oh, I'm sorry. I think that is mine. It's just an old paper I was doodling on. I'll put it in the trash."
The sentence would be stronger by deleting five unnecessary words:
"Oh, I'm sorry. It's just an old paper I was doodling on. I'll put it in the trash."
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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2023
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Fear of the unknown can become very debilitating.
I like how your story unfolds and ends with an excellent summation.
The art portion towards the end was particularly interesting as I enjoy doing artwork, too.
I'm glad you have shared this part of your life.
Notes:
The wording here causes a weak sentence:
The possibility of that happening to me, had caused a sleepless night.
Changing it a little creates more power:
The possibility of that happening to me resulted in a sleepless night.
Another area to watch for is unnecessary wordings. Such as:
"Oh, I'm sorry. I think that is mine. It's just an old paper I was doodling on. I'll put it in the trash."
The sentence would be stronger by deleting five unnecessary words:
"Oh, I'm sorry. It's just an old paper I was doodling on. I'll put it in the trash."
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much for the review, comments and suggestions. You are correct. These things you mention do need correcting.