Unforgettable Memory
Still in my mind ...27 total reviews
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Wendy,
how very tragic that you had to witness such a terrible event. I don't doubt that if you could have helped that you would have. It's one of life's unfortunate lessons, that sometimes taking chances can lead to unpleasant consequences. I'm sorry you experienced that, but I appreciate you sharing it.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Hello Wendy,
how very tragic that you had to witness such a terrible event. I don't doubt that if you could have helped that you would have. It's one of life's unfortunate lessons, that sometimes taking chances can lead to unpleasant consequences. I'm sorry you experienced that, but I appreciate you sharing it.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 03-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much Tom. I appreciate your kind review. I don't think about it often, just from time to time. But I still feel regret that I was unable to do anything to help.
Wendy
Comment from w.j.debi
You set up the scene well and did an excellent job putting in the place with the protagonist. What a helpless feeling, to wonder if someone is in trouble and not be able to do anything to assist.
This should do well in the contest. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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You set up the scene well and did an excellent job putting in the place with the protagonist. What a helpless feeling, to wonder if someone is in trouble and not be able to do anything to assist.
This should do well in the contest. Best of luck.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much for such a lovely review. You have understood my feelings perfectly. Many thanks for the good wishes too.
Wendy
Comment from Irene Bratton
Hi, Wendy. This is such a sad story, and I'm so sorry you've carried this with you. You've written it very well, expressing the initial peace, later suspense, and eventual horror of this day. I felt I was sitting right next to you. Awesome work in only one hundred words. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Hi, Wendy. This is such a sad story, and I'm so sorry you've carried this with you. You've written it very well, expressing the initial peace, later suspense, and eventual horror of this day. I felt I was sitting right next to you. Awesome work in only one hundred words. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much for a most understanding and compassionate review. You stated perfectly what I had hoped to achieve in the piece. Many thanks for the six wonderful stars.
Wendy
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You're very welcome, Wendy. :)
Comment from Pantygynt
There could be several explanations, none of them very encouraging and all ending badly for one of the two black dots that caught your attention. was really held by the way you told the story.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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There could be several explanations, none of them very encouraging and all ending badly for one of the two black dots that caught your attention. was really held by the way you told the story.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much for reviewing. Much appreciated. I know I couldn't have helped but it seemed wrong to just sit there, trying vainly to see two bobbing heads once more.
Wendy
Comment from royowen
How unfortunate for you Wendy, the funny thing was with all my athletic abilities, I wasn't particularly a strong swimmer, but my wife, who grew up on Wollongong surf beaches and both my daughters who had achieved bronze medallion level swimming are strong swimmers, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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How unfortunate for you Wendy, the funny thing was with all my athletic abilities, I wasn't particularly a strong swimmer, but my wife, who grew up on Wollongong surf beaches and both my daughters who had achieved bronze medallion level swimming are strong swimmers, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Thanks Roy for sharing.
Wendy
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Most welcome
Comment from kahpot
Wow! that must have been a terrible time, though you did the right thing it does make us feel helpless, and really you did not know anything was wrong until later, a sad though wonderful read, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Wow! that must have been a terrible time, though you did the right thing it does make us feel helpless, and really you did not know anything was wrong until later, a sad though wonderful read, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 01-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing with understanding. Always appreciated.
Wendy
Comment from Pearl Edwards
What started out as a lovely day turned tragic while you watched. I can understand your feelings Wendy but sadly there was nothing you could have done. Today, in those circumstances mobile phones would be a saviour.
Thanks for sharing.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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What started out as a lovely day turned tragic while you watched. I can understand your feelings Wendy but sadly there was nothing you could have done. Today, in those circumstances mobile phones would be a saviour.
Thanks for sharing.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 01-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Thank you Valda for your understanding and compassionate review. Yes, a mobile phone then might have made a difference. I greatly value the six lovely stars.
Wendy
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
You use "almost" twice in the opening paragraph; "nearly" or "mostly"?
Were you there when the second person came out of the water? I guess not since you only learned of the drowning the following day. If you had gone in, I imagine two would have died that day. As much as I hate cell phones, they can be life savers.
Thanks for sharing this story with us.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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You use "almost" twice in the opening paragraph; "nearly" or "mostly"?
Were you there when the second person came out of the water? I guess not since you only learned of the drowning the following day. If you had gone in, I imagine two would have died that day. As much as I hate cell phones, they can be life savers.
Thanks for sharing this story with us.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 01-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Thank you Pam, both for your understanding review and for the pick-up. The second "almost" was a late addition as I couldn't find an appropriate image with a fully cloudless sky. So I have changed it to "nearly".
Wendy
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
What a sad tale this is Wendy, but what could you do sat on the shore? By the time any help arrived the poor swimmer would have been long gone. We underestimate the power of the sea, it is dangerous and even strong swimmers are caught out, a sad experience for you here that you have never forgotten, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2023
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What a sad tale this is Wendy, but what could you do sat on the shore? By the time any help arrived the poor swimmer would have been long gone. We underestimate the power of the sea, it is dangerous and even strong swimmers are caught out, a sad experience for you here that you have never forgotten, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2023
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Thank you Dolly for your compassionate and understanding review. You are right. I appreciate your words greatly.
Wendy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
How sad!! I understand the guilt you must have felt. At times like that all we can do is pray that God will intervene and then leave it in His hands. Thank you for sharing this story with us. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2023
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How sad!! I understand the guilt you must have felt. At times like that all we can do is pray that God will intervene and then leave it in His hands. Thank you for sharing this story with us. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2023
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You are right. There was nothing I could do, yet it seemed wrong to just sit there and wonder if I had really seen two dots etc. Many thanks for your review, and for the good wishes as well.
Wendy