Country Bumpkin
My freshman year26 total reviews
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nicely done. Good work.
I, too, went to a country one-room schoolhouse in Michigan. Mercer School in Allegan County, but only for a couple years. One teacher - 28 kids.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Very nicely done. Good work.
I, too, went to a country one-room schoolhouse in Michigan. Mercer School in Allegan County, but only for a couple years. One teacher - 28 kids.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you. I went to the country school from kindergarten through eighth grade. We had to walk a mile to and from school. You weren't too far from me. I lived in Oceana County. I have a nephew who works in law enforcement in the town of Allegan.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
I had a completely different experience, but I still had personal feedback from teachers, because of the good quality teachers that we had. It is excellent that you were able to stand out and be recognized by your teacher, for your creativity. Creativity is behind any good answer or positive solution to any problem. Your story focuses on that and, I think you should feel proud that you naturally had that creativity because some people go to all of the best schools but come out without one ounce of creativity. Good for you!
Best wishes!
Alexandra
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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I had a completely different experience, but I still had personal feedback from teachers, because of the good quality teachers that we had. It is excellent that you were able to stand out and be recognized by your teacher, for your creativity. Creativity is behind any good answer or positive solution to any problem. Your story focuses on that and, I think you should feel proud that you naturally had that creativity because some people go to all of the best schools but come out without one ounce of creativity. Good for you!
Best wishes!
Alexandra
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you. I always loved to make up stories when I was a child. I should have written some of them down. I wish I would have kept a copy of the fox story, but I didn't.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice, interesting and well written contest entry for the High School Memories contest. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the picture you shared with us. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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This is a very nice, interesting and well written contest entry for the High School Memories contest. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the picture you shared with us. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you. Yeah, I do look like a country bumpkin in the photo. We were 100% country kids.
Comment from LJbutterfly
You provided an interesting introduction to your story, with the description of how you felt when you entered high school. Your wording is succinct and to the point as your story progresses. Details provided allows the reader to easily envision each of your experiences and travel along with you. Even though you did not win the scholarship, your final sentence was understandable and satisfying. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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You provided an interesting introduction to your story, with the description of how you felt when you entered high school. Your wording is succinct and to the point as your story progresses. Details provided allows the reader to easily envision each of your experiences and travel along with you. Even though you did not win the scholarship, your final sentence was understandable and satisfying. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you. We understood that only a senior could win the scholarship. They never gave me that kind of an chance when I became a senior.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
What a wonderful story! I thoroughly enjoyed reading it and learning about your very relatable experience adjusting to a new school. I thought your perspective on Michigan was inspired and inspiring and, even in its precis form, I found myself immersed in your description. It set you on this path of creativity and self-belief and I think it is therefore a perfect entry for this particular contest. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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What a wonderful story! I thoroughly enjoyed reading it and learning about your very relatable experience adjusting to a new school. I thought your perspective on Michigan was inspired and inspiring and, even in its precis form, I found myself immersed in your description. It set you on this path of creativity and self-belief and I think it is therefore a perfect entry for this particular contest. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you. I wish I would have kept the story so I could share it with all of you. I doubt that I could write it exactly as I did then. I'm seventy seven, so that was a very long time ago.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a wonderful uplifting story and after your essay was declared the best in the school, I bet the other students had a bit more respect for you after that. I love success stories and yours is entertaining, interesting and joyful, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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This is a wonderful uplifting story and after your essay was declared the best in the school, I bet the other students had a bit more respect for you after that. I love success stories and yours is entertaining, interesting and joyful, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you. Nope, they just thought I got lucky and didn't change their attitude. They were not a nice bunch of kids.
Comment from pome lover
Well, that's a good memory, and good for you for trying and for your originality in your entry.
Yes, kids can be cruel. I was new in 4th grade many years ago and still believed in Santa Claus. A story was read in class about the spirit of Christmas and the lovely myth of Santa. My face gave me away and everybody laughed at me. Silly to remember things like that but we do. Or, I do.
And I don't think we outgrow shyness, though I guess some do.
That was a good story. I know you were proud of your paper.
Katharine
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Well, that's a good memory, and good for you for trying and for your originality in your entry.
Yes, kids can be cruel. I was new in 4th grade many years ago and still believed in Santa Claus. A story was read in class about the spirit of Christmas and the lovely myth of Santa. My face gave me away and everybody laughed at me. Silly to remember things like that but we do. Or, I do.
And I don't think we outgrow shyness, though I guess some do.
That was a good story. I know you were proud of your paper.
Katharine
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you. You're right about the shyness. It took me a long time to feel comfortable around people I didn't know. I still don't care for crowds or meeting new people.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
The emergence of the writer, and with such humble beginnings. I'm proud of you for having the best essay, but understand why they gave the scholarship to the senior. Thanks for sharing your humble story,
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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The emergence of the writer, and with such humble beginnings. I'm proud of you for having the best essay, but understand why they gave the scholarship to the senior. Thanks for sharing your humble story,
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.
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My pleasure!
Comment from Terry Broxson
This is a well-written entry for this contest. I think it could do well. It does beg the question if you would consider posting the original story. I think it would be fun to read. I'm sure you can come up with a creative way to frame the story within a story. Excellent. Terry.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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This is a well-written entry for this contest. I think it could do well. It does beg the question if you would consider posting the original story. I think it would be fun to read. I'm sure you can come up with a creative way to frame the story within a story. Excellent. Terry.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you. I never saved the original story, though I have often wished I had. It had a lot of grammar errors if I remember correctly.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello, Mystery Writer!
How I enjoyed reading your memories of high school!
I do not know who I am addressing, but I immediately recognized the towns of Shelby and Hart as I, too, am a Michigander - born in Saginaw and have lived in Traverse City for all 44 years of my married life.
Your offering resonated with me, as although I was not a "Couutry (Country) Bumpkin," when I entered high school, I was definitely a "duck out of water" having attended a Catholic elementary school all eight years before enrolling in a Class "A" high school in Saginaw.
Loved the thought that you wrote your essay from the perspective of a fox.
Wise teacher, too...
Thank you for sharing!
Please edit spelling of "Couutry" Bumpkin
Best wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Hello, Mystery Writer!
How I enjoyed reading your memories of high school!
I do not know who I am addressing, but I immediately recognized the towns of Shelby and Hart as I, too, am a Michigander - born in Saginaw and have lived in Traverse City for all 44 years of my married life.
Your offering resonated with me, as although I was not a "Couutry (Country) Bumpkin," when I entered high school, I was definitely a "duck out of water" having attended a Catholic elementary school all eight years before enrolling in a Class "A" high school in Saginaw.
Loved the thought that you wrote your essay from the perspective of a fox.
Wise teacher, too...
Thank you for sharing!
Please edit spelling of "Couutry" Bumpkin
Best wishes!
diane
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you, and thanks for catching my boo-boo. I checked the body of the writing, but never once looked at the title. I appreciate reviewers like you.