Conspiracies
A Pleiades poems the dangers of conspiracies,11 total reviews
Comment from Eleri
This is a good idea for a Pleiades poem and I like your rhyming. However, do you mean collating or collecting in the last but one line as I don't think that collieting is actually a word. Also, your rhythm could be a little tidier as line one has eights beats, line three has ten while all of the others have nine. Having said that I do like this poem so good luck in the contest
Eleri
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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023
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This is a good idea for a Pleiades poem and I like your rhyming. However, do you mean collating or collecting in the last but one line as I don't think that collieting is actually a word. Also, your rhythm could be a little tidier as line one has eights beats, line three has ten while all of the others have nine. Having said that I do like this poem so good luck in the contest
Eleri
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Comment Written 16-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023
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Thank you Eleri, I appreciate the reivew. The word collecting got messed somehow. Thanks for pointing it out. I made all the lines have 9 syllables. Are you sure you counted right?
