Miranda's Trouble In Paradise
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Rita's Dilemma "Miranda tries to find Dougie.
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Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very interesting. Excellent dialogue.
Waylon sounds very authentic. Sounds as if you've really had conversations with young men (boys).
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Very interesting. Excellent dialogue.
Waylon sounds very authentic. Sounds as if you've really had conversations with young men (boys).
Best wishes.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Three sons. Food first, conversation filled with cringe worthy info and inappropriate humor. Loved every minute of it. Thank you for this nice review. Gretchen
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He clutches the over sized tool
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This is the way the sentence appears on my screen. I 'bout left my seat, so surprised at your word choice. Then I moved on to the next line and gave myself a good tongue lashing.
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You just made the image that much funnier. Thank you for that! Lol. Gretchen
Comment from JSD
Another wonder from your imagination. I genuinely don't know how you do it. As usual your characters are real and invite the reader to want to know more. Take me on another journey!
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Another wonder from your imagination. I genuinely don't know how you do it. As usual your characters are real and invite the reader to want to know more. Take me on another journey!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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With Miranda, it's always a journey. Lol. Thanks so much fir this awesome review. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
Another great chapter and you are lucky, seeing one of my other favourites has not posted to her regular story this week. Glad Miranda and Waylon get along well.
One left-out word. It's bad enough that Mitch pulls me (over),
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Another great chapter and you are lucky, seeing one of my other favourites has not posted to her regular story this week. Glad Miranda and Waylon get along well.
One left-out word. It's bad enough that Mitch pulls me (over),
Comment Written 11-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Thanks for picking up on that spag and for the extra star and excellent review. Very kind of you. Gretchen
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Miranda to the rescue! LOL She will probably give him an earfull if she discovers Rita's fears are fact. I really like Miranda. I would love to have a friend like her. Mitch didn't give her a speeding ticket, but he made her pay by embarrassing her as she drove thru town. She eventually gave in to her punishment. Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Miranda to the rescue! LOL She will probably give him an earfull if she discovers Rita's fears are fact. I really like Miranda. I would love to have a friend like her. Mitch didn't give her a speeding ticket, but he made her pay by embarrassing her as she drove thru town. She eventually gave in to her punishment. Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 11-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Mitch and Miranda tend to go from lovers to brother and sister, depending on the day. Thank you so much for this. And, you're right, we all need a friend like Miranda. Gretchen
Comment from JT traveller
Great story. You had me captivated from the beginning until the end of the read. A useful tip someone gave me was to describe the way people's faces reacted when they spoke. I really enjoyed the dialogue, Gretchen and am looking forward to the next instalment. Jacqui
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Great story. You had me captivated from the beginning until the end of the read. A useful tip someone gave me was to describe the way people's faces reacted when they spoke. I really enjoyed the dialogue, Gretchen and am looking forward to the next instalment. Jacqui
Comment Written 11-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Thanks so much. I'm with you about the physical response to emotions. Adding an adverb everytime is lazy writing. Body language tells so much more. Gretchen
Comment from damommy
I fear for Bill if Miranda finds out he's cheating on Rita. I think he may be, but we can always hope for something better. She's right - her life certainly isn't dull.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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I fear for Bill if Miranda finds out he's cheating on Rita. I think he may be, but we can always hope for something better. She's right - her life certainly isn't dull.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Thank you for this nice review. I really appreciate it. Gretchen
Comment from Jay Squires
Blame it on my age, but have we been introduced to Rita's Bill. I don't remember it. In fact, she played only a secondary role in the first book. I didn't even know she was married. Anyway, it makes for another plotline squiggling off that you can tap into later.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Blame it on my age, but have we been introduced to Rita's Bill. I don't remember it. In fact, she played only a secondary role in the first book. I didn't even know she was married. Anyway, it makes for another plotline squiggling off that you can tap into later.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Never mentioned him or Rita's marital status, just that she had two sons. So, I found out when you did. Lol. It will be a minor plot line. Thanks for this. Gretchen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I love Miranda. She is the kind of busybody who doesn't tell, she goes out and gives the erroring guy the business. She also has a great relationship with Waylon that will probably be the making of him if she doesn't end up in jail or dead. Mitch is pretty cool, too. Is Dragon Lady Waylon's grandmother. You do a great job of creating characters who are distinctly different.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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I love Miranda. She is the kind of busybody who doesn't tell, she goes out and gives the erroring guy the business. She also has a great relationship with Waylon that will probably be the making of him if she doesn't end up in jail or dead. Mitch is pretty cool, too. Is Dragon Lady Waylon's grandmother. You do a great job of creating characters who are distinctly different.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Dragon lady is her exhusband's mother. It's Farley's mother. She is the principal at Waylon's high school. Thank you. The characters create themselves honestly. Appreciate the nice review. Gretchen
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting and well written chapter you have penned. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery with your words. Thank you for sharing! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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This is a very interesting and well written chapter you have penned. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery with your words. Thank you for sharing! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 10-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, so Miranda is addicted to mysteries and finding the answer. Well, that makes the reason she's searching for a man like Doug understandable. It could be anyone or anything. She can't help herself.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Hmm, so Miranda is addicted to mysteries and finding the answer. Well, that makes the reason she's searching for a man like Doug understandable. It could be anyone or anything. She can't help herself.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Nope. She cannot help herself. Thanks for the review. Gretchen
