Miranda's Trouble In Paradise
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Extra Curricular"Miranda tries to find Dougie.
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Comment from Jay Squires
OMG, I didn't know how much I missed Miranda. It's so good to have her back.
"I'll see you tonight," I call out as he races out of the bathroom and grabs his backpack off the table by the door. "Make good choices," I say without looking up. [Damn! Your blend of dialogue and narrative is flawless, Gretchen!]
Still don't have a cell phone, so if I do get stuck, I'm shit out of luck. [My son would take one look at that sentence and conclude that Miranda IS going to get stuck. He points out that every modern day thriller or horror book or film has to deal with the problem of cell phones -- find some way not to have them be able to call for help: a storm that cuts out reception is used most often. (Now that I'm finished, in a sense he was right. She didn't get stuck. But if she had a cell phone, which I don't know why she doesn't, she would have called her job and wouldn't have been speeding ... and getting pulled over.]
Wow, this was good!
Jay
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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OMG, I didn't know how much I missed Miranda. It's so good to have her back.
"I'll see you tonight," I call out as he races out of the bathroom and grabs his backpack off the table by the door. "Make good choices," I say without looking up. [Damn! Your blend of dialogue and narrative is flawless, Gretchen!]
Still don't have a cell phone, so if I do get stuck, I'm shit out of luck. [My son would take one look at that sentence and conclude that Miranda IS going to get stuck. He points out that every modern day thriller or horror book or film has to deal with the problem of cell phones -- find some way not to have them be able to call for help: a storm that cuts out reception is used most often. (Now that I'm finished, in a sense he was right. She didn't get stuck. But if she had a cell phone, which I don't know why she doesn't, she would have called her job and wouldn't have been speeding ... and getting pulled over.]
Wow, this was good!
Jay
Comment Written 09-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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She doesn't have a cell phone because she doesn't want people bothering her and she doesn't like how people stare at their phone instead of talking. Thanks, Jay. So glad you're happy to read her story again. Gretchen
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
You have opened your sequel Miranda novel with verve. I especially liked the breakfast scene, very realistic of early morning inter-generation dynamics. kay
it a mute point > it's a moot point (I think)
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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You have opened your sequel Miranda novel with verve. I especially liked the breakfast scene, very realistic of early morning inter-generation dynamics. kay
it a mute point > it's a moot point (I think)
Comment Written 09-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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Thank you for this and for pointing out the spag. Much appreciated. Gretchen
Comment from JSD
'Now, it's a moot point' is I think what you want. Strange spelling I know!
Anyway, this is fun and engaging as usual. I look forward to watching the story develop. I do like 'the jarring mating call of the men in blue'.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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'Now, it's a moot point' is I think what you want. Strange spelling I know!
Anyway, this is fun and engaging as usual. I look forward to watching the story develop. I do like 'the jarring mating call of the men in blue'.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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Thanks so much. I will correct the spelling. Appreciate the review. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I so like Mitch and Miranda's interactions. They're priceless. I really hope she shares what she was doing out there and about the bottles. They might be of some help.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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I so like Mitch and Miranda's interactions. They're priceless. I really hope she shares what she was doing out there and about the bottles. They might be of some help.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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I think Miranda is grasping at straws. She is hellbent on solving Dougie's disappearance. It will cause friction between Mitch and her. Thanks fir this. Gretchen
Comment from nancy_e_davis
But, now it a mute point."[it's]
She is lucky it was Mitch. She needs
to tell him what she is up to, but
we know she won't. LOL That would
be out of character for our Miranda.
I'm happy to see she has returned for real!
Nancy:)
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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But, now it a mute point."[it's]
She is lucky it was Mitch. She needs
to tell him what she is up to, but
we know she won't. LOL That would
be out of character for our Miranda.
I'm happy to see she has returned for real!
Nancy:)
Comment Written 09-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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It would be out of character for her to ask for help. Lol. She and Mitch are going to butt heads a bit in this book. Gretchen
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I'm sure of it. lol Well done. Nancy
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting and well written chapter. You used very good descriptive words and imagery from your words. Very good dialogue. I look forward to reading more! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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This is a very interesting and well written chapter. You used very good descriptive words and imagery from your words. Very good dialogue. I look forward to reading more! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 09-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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Thank you, Teri. I appreciate this nice review. Gretchen
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Comment from royowen
So, Miranda wants to know what has happened to Dougie, she finds his pick up and the battery's flat, so she knows he left his lights, but why? Nobody meets or goes to the swamp alone, a good episode, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : but now it('s) a moot point.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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So, Miranda wants to know what has happened to Dougie, she finds his pick up and the battery's flat, so she knows he left his lights, but why? Nobody meets or goes to the swamp alone, a good episode, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : but now it('s) a moot point.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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Thanks for the spag alert. I post from my phone and auto correct is a tyrant. Lol. Thanks so much. Gretchen
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Comment from BethShelby
I enjoy reading your writing. It captures and holds my attention. I've not read about the lady before, but I see this is only chapter two. You tend to have more than one story going at a time. There seems to be a mystery in this one. Can I assume Dougie was/is her husband?
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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I enjoy reading your writing. It captures and holds my attention. I've not read about the lady before, but I see this is only chapter two. You tend to have more than one story going at a time. There seems to be a mystery in this one. Can I assume Dougie was/is her husband?
Comment Written 09-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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Dougie was ex boyfriend. She wants to find him for his son who she is taking care of. Thanks for this. Gretchen
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Oh, of course. Now I remember. I did read the first chapter. I've been reviewing some many things, lately they are starting to run together. I'm glad I'm remembering it now.
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Oh, of course. Now I remember. I did read the first chapter. I've been reviewing some many things, lately they are starting to run together. I'm glad I'm remembering it now.
Comment from John Ciarmello
Yes, yes, I had to catch up again, but in a good way! It was nice to revisit these characters.
It seems that Mich and Miranda don't have the same feelings for one another, according to the traffic stop. Hmm?
I can't wait to see where that is going. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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Yes, yes, I had to catch up again, but in a good way! It was nice to revisit these characters.
It seems that Mich and Miranda don't have the same feelings for one another, according to the traffic stop. Hmm?
I can't wait to see where that is going. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 09-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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It's been many months since the timetable of the last book. She has probably tested his patience routinely. Lol. Thank you so much for the enthusiastic review. And especially for the sixth star. Gretchen
Comment from damommy
She better be careful or something bad will happen to her. She shouldn't be prowling around the crash site alone. It's good she got off getting a speeding ticket.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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She better be careful or something bad will happen to her. She shouldn't be prowling around the crash site alone. It's good she got off getting a speeding ticket.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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Of course something bad will happen. It's Miranda. Lol. Thank you so much. Gretchen