Two Monarchs
The Queen and the Stag.15 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Yes, I must admit I hate it. I went hunting with my father and his friend, I soon found out I had no stomach for killing rabbits even though they are a pest in Australia, I never went shooting again except in a shooting gallery are the show, with a slug gun, beautifully written loop poem, you're good at these Kay, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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Yes, I must admit I hate it. I went hunting with my father and his friend, I soon found out I had no stomach for killing rabbits even though they are a pest in Australia, I never went shooting again except in a shooting gallery are the show, with a slug gun, beautifully written loop poem, you're good at these Kay, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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Hi Roy, The Queen was the richest woman in the World. A hateful sport. I haven't seen you writing of late. Hope all is well. Kay xx
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I?m fine
Comment from Wendy G
I hate that humans hunt for sport and pleasure. It's cruel and unnecessary. Your poem speaks well of the cruelty and it is very sad that the previous monarch could not value these majestic creatures. Well said.
Wendy
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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I hate that humans hunt for sport and pleasure. It's cruel and unnecessary. Your poem speaks well of the cruelty and it is very sad that the previous monarch could not value these majestic creatures. Well said.
Wendy
Comment Written 11-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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Hi Wendy, The Queen was the richest woman in the world. Still, they had venison for dinner. She was proud of herself. K xx
Comment from lyenochka
You're right that humans rich or poor, common or royal, should not kill animals for sport. There was a time when people hunted for food but we don't need that now. Great job sharing this story in your loop
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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You're right that humans rich or poor, common or royal, should not kill animals for sport. There was a time when people hunted for food but we don't need that now. Great job sharing this story in your loop
Comment Written 11-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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Hi Lena, I think she just wanted a trophy for her collection and venison for dinner. The richest woman in the world needed no killing of innocent animals. European Royals all went on hunts. K xx
Comment from Amber Mathis
I really like this poem that you wrote and I believe that the picture and the color for the background go with the theme perfectly. I have hunted deer in the past for food and not just the antlers. It makes me sick when people kill animals just got the rack or points. Thank you for the really good read. It is well flowed and paced thought the whole thing. Keep writing great things like this. - Amber :)
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I really like this poem that you wrote and I believe that the picture and the color for the background go with the theme perfectly. I have hunted deer in the past for food and not just the antlers. It makes me sick when people kill animals just got the rack or points. Thank you for the really good read. It is well flowed and paced thought the whole thing. Keep writing great things like this. - Amber :)
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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Thanks for reading Amber. K xx
Comment from Julie Lau
Hi, Aussie! This is a very well-done poem of its type, and it brings home a relevant message. However you may wish to change a couple of words, laying and lays, to lying and lies. This is because, used in the present tense, the verb 'lay' needs an object, i.e. something needs to be laid, whether it's an egg, carpet, a toy ... However, it's okay to say "now I lay me down to sleep", because 'me' is the object. These days it's more normal to say "I lay myself down." I hope this is useful, Aussie Julie
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Hi, Aussie! This is a very well-done poem of its type, and it brings home a relevant message. However you may wish to change a couple of words, laying and lays, to lying and lies. This is because, used in the present tense, the verb 'lay' needs an object, i.e. something needs to be laid, whether it's an egg, carpet, a toy ... However, it's okay to say "now I lay me down to sleep", because 'me' is the object. These days it's more normal to say "I lay myself down." I hope this is useful, Aussie Julie
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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Hi Julie, I edited the poem by your direction. Thank you for reading. K xx