Comment from royowen

Excellent

Yes, I must admit I hate it. I went hunting with my father and his friend, I soon found out I had no stomach for killing rabbits even though they are a pest in Australia, I never went shooting again except in a shooting gallery are the show, with a slug gun, beautifully written loop poem, you're good at these Kay, blessings Roy

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023

Hi Roy, The Queen was the richest woman in the World. A hateful sport. I haven't seen you writing of late. Hope all is well. Kay xx

reply by royowen on 12-Aug-2023

I?m fine

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

I hate that humans hunt for sport and pleasure. It's cruel and unnecessary. Your poem speaks well of the cruelty and it is very sad that the previous monarch could not value these majestic creatures. Well said.
Wendy

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023

Hi Wendy, The Queen was the richest woman in the world. Still, they had venison for dinner. She was proud of herself. K xx

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

You're right that humans rich or poor, common or royal, should not kill animals for sport. There was a time when people hunted for food but we don't need that now. Great job sharing this story in your loop

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023

Hi Lena, I think she just wanted a trophy for her collection and venison for dinner. The richest woman in the world needed no killing of innocent animals. European Royals all went on hunts. K xx

Comment from Amber Mathis

Excellent

I really like this poem that you wrote and I believe that the picture and the color for the background go with the theme perfectly. I have hunted deer in the past for food and not just the antlers. It makes me sick when people kill animals just got the rack or points. Thank you for the really good read. It is well flowed and paced thought the whole thing. Keep writing great things like this. - Amber :)

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023

Thanks for reading Amber. K xx

Comment from Julie Lau

Excellent

Hi, Aussie! This is a very well-done poem of its type, and it brings home a relevant message. However you may wish to change a couple of words, laying and lays, to lying and lies. This is because, used in the present tense, the verb 'lay' needs an object, i.e. something needs to be laid, whether it's an egg, carpet, a toy ... However, it's okay to say "now I lay me down to sleep", because 'me' is the object. These days it's more normal to say "I lay myself down." I hope this is useful, Aussie Julie

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023

Hi Julie, I edited the poem by your direction. Thank you for reading. K xx