After-Mask
Avoid that Mask!16 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
What a series of awful outcomes with each action taken in this story. The protagonist and Blimpy should have left little Bobby alone, or simply spoken to him about hurling rocks at the frogs. Many people would still be alive. Your message was expressed by many examples of actions causing reactions and "aftermask." Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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What a series of awful outcomes with each action taken in this story. The protagonist and Blimpy should have left little Bobby alone, or simply spoken to him about hurling rocks at the frogs. Many people would still be alive. Your message was expressed by many examples of actions causing reactions and "aftermask." Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much!
Comment from JSD
A bizarre piece, with more deaths than in most tales on here! Engagingly told and amusing in parts. Well done and all the very best with the competition.
John
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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A bizarre piece, with more deaths than in most tales on here! Engagingly told and amusing in parts. Well done and all the very best with the competition.
John
Comment Written 07-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much for reading and responding!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I would say that this is a circular story that ends with killing the frogs. I guess the moral is watch what you are doing because karma is a bitch and hurts you back. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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I would say that this is a circular story that ends with killing the frogs. I guess the moral is watch what you are doing because karma is a bitch and hurts you back. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Ah, the circle of life . . . or would that be the circle of death?
I wonder if catastrophe chains like this really occur?
Regardless, I saw no errors.
Good piece of work!
D
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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Ah, the circle of life . . . or would that be the circle of death?
I wonder if catastrophe chains like this really occur?
Regardless, I saw no errors.
Good piece of work!
D
Comment Written 07-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023
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I often DO make errors, though-mainly because of tremors in my hand.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Wow, that's quite an intense story! I can take a breath now:) It's faultlessly written in clear text with a strong, albeit exaggerated, message throughout about consequences. Well, at least I hope it's exaggerated! It fits the brief well and takes the reader on an imaginative and very troubling journey. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest! Debbie
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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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Wow, that's quite an intense story! I can take a breath now:) It's faultlessly written in clear text with a strong, albeit exaggerated, message throughout about consequences. Well, at least I hope it's exaggerated! It fits the brief well and takes the reader on an imaginative and very troubling journey. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest! Debbie
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Comment Written 06-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much. i made it all up with my infinitesimal small brain.
Comment from lancellot
Well, it is a strange story or narrative. It does go on and on, but in the end it comes around full circle. I think the writing and editing is good. I did not see anything that needs attention. It is all telling, but I don't you meant it to be a serious piece.
Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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Well, it is a strange story or narrative. It does go on and on, but in the end it comes around full circle. I think the writing and editing is good. I did not see anything that needs attention. It is all telling, but I don't you meant it to be a serious piece.
Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 06-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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Lately, I've been trying some pieces in a lighter vein.