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Comment from Ric Myworld
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Children are what makes the world go around. Yes, and sometimes cause it to flip flop and fly around out of control. There is nothing like them, yet once they are grown and move on, it's most times a relief. And in my case, then here they came again. LOL. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 03-Aug-2023
    Thank you Ric. My kids kids kept coming back home too. Thankfully not any more but I do see them often.
    Beth
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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Decisions, decisions, decisions, and I feel you when you are saying that you didn't want to leave in that house, Usually men are making decision without consulting their wives and this brings a small rift in the relationship.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 03-Aug-2023
    Thank you Iza. You understand. When two people are married the decision of where to live should be as much hers and his.
    Beth
reply by Iza Deleanu on 07-Aug-2023
    Yup, agreed
Comment from Brett Matthew West
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Should "for leader" be for the leader of this group?

Good you were apprehensive about this leader and whatever influence he may have had on Carol.

Should "didn't have problem" be didn't have a problem?

Very interesting reading.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 05-Aug-2023
    Thank you Brett, I appreciate the review and you calling my attention to a couple of things I'd missed.
    Beth
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
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I always enjoy your family stories, Beth, and often relate to things you talk about. This one seemed to have quite a few spags, which threw me off because I felt I should point them out (I would want others to do that for me). I made a few corrections/suggestions, but finally stopped interrupting my reading and let some slide.

I think one more edit would solve this problem, if you are so inclined.

Thanks for the entertaining read:-)

xo
Pam

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 05-Aug-2023
    Thank you Pam. I did go back over it and corrected some things. I hope I got them alll. I'm glad you're enjoying my stroy.
    Beth
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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Another well written chapter here, Beth! I'm really getting to know your family so well. There is always something interesting going on and your family life is becoming my guilty pleasure:)) Thank you so much for sharing and I look forward to finding out what Christi's going to be getting up to! Take care Debbie

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 05-Aug-2023
    Thank you so much for telling me you enjoy reading my story. Maybe I'm too open with my life but I like that it is way for peole to get to know me and my family.
    Beth
reply by Debbie D'Arcy on 05-Aug-2023
    I think it's a wonderful gift to pass down to your family! And, personally, I think thoughts and communication are always a blessing for family members. Am still not sure, however, whether I should have posted my poem about my sister (The Web) without speaking to her first and am feeling more than a bit guilty:( But that's a different matter to your stories about childhood etc.
Comment from Ben Colder
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Out of six. Another good one, Beth. I remember Jim Jones and his idiot schemes. Totally evil and how he succumbed several people to their death.
Glad your daughter never got caught in that mess.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 03-Aug-2023
    Thank you for the review and comments. Too many people are attracted to those with a strange message that isn't of God. We should never put too much faith in another human.
    Beth
reply by Ben Colder on 03-Aug-2023
    True. Jesus warn that would happen.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
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Wow. It's fun and challenging to have more than one child. I wonder what happened to Carol and the older man. Did you move to New Orleans back then? I visited there once about 31 years ago. It was fun.

Well done.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2023
    Thank you. I lived in New Orleans for seventeen years before we moved to Chattanooga. Carol eventually lost interest in that group, but she is still subject to getting into things like conspiracy theories that make no sense to me.
Comment from patcelaw
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Yes, when it comes to raising children, there are many things we have to consider. It sounds like you had your share of things to consider as well and enjoyed your story very much, and it seems as though you and Evelyn did a good job of raising your children. Have a good day, and God bless.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 03-Aug-2023
    Thank you so much for the review and comments.
    Beth
Comment from JSD
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Your hair looks as though it has miraculously survived, judging by your picture. My gray is starting to take over following the year I've just had. Maybe I should do what you have done and write it all down?

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 05-Aug-2023
    Thank you for the review and comments. I've been fortunate despite all the kids have put me through that I don't get gray easily. I think it is good idea to write about your life. In the future those of you kin with appreciate it. I wish my family had more things written.
    Beth
Comment from jmdg1954
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Beth.
This chapter I thought was well written and easy to follow, probably since it focused mainly on Carol and Evan.

I would have had my sonar up and working overtime if my daughter would've joined a cult-like group in the manner Carol did.

Excellent writing.
John

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 Comment Written 02-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 04-Aug-2023
    Thank you John. I appreciate the review and comments. I was very concerned of the group Carol joined. She eventually decided this wasn't for her.
    Beth