2023 Gypsy's Haiku
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Comment from royowen
I love the ambiguity of your 5/7/5 this most imaginative piece, the idea of the plums diving into a swift flowing river, how precious that is, beautifully written dear Gypsy, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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I love the ambiguity of your 5/7/5 this most imaginative piece, the idea of the plums diving into a swift flowing river, how precious that is, beautifully written dear Gypsy, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much. Roy. I appreciate your time and kind review.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This poem and presentation are not. perfect for the 5/7/5 contest! As usual your Author's Note adds so much and is very informative as far as poem form as well.
Best luck in the contest! :)) love, Alexan
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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This poem and presentation are not. perfect for the 5/7/5 contest! As usual your Author's Note adds so much and is very informative as far as poem form as well.
Best luck in the contest! :)) love, Alexan
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much. Alexan. I appreciate your time and kind review.
Love
Marival
Comment from Douglas Goff
Well done my friend. Beautiful use of colors. This is a great pattern of syllable count as well with less restriction.
Good job and thank you for sharing with us.
D
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Well done my friend. Beautiful use of colors. This is a great pattern of syllable count as well with less restriction.
Good job and thank you for sharing with us.
D
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Teri7
Gypsy, This is a very beautiful and well written 5-7-5 poem you have penned for the contest. You used very lovely imagery from the art work you chose and great descriptive words. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Gypsy, This is a very beautiful and well written 5-7-5 poem you have penned for the contest. You used very lovely imagery from the art work you chose and great descriptive words. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from JT traveller
Perfect colour palette for the poem. Your words create vivid imagery of the petals slowly floating to the ground from above. A beautiful escape. A dreamy write. Jacqueline
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Perfect colour palette for the poem. Your words create vivid imagery of the petals slowly floating to the ground from above. A beautiful escape. A dreamy write. Jacqueline
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from GWHARGIS
This had a tragic feel. The use of torn and dive give it a suicidal feel. It is dramatic. I love the visual of the leaves falling into the river and being carried away. Beautiful piece of poetry. Gretchen
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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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This had a tragic feel. The use of torn and dive give it a suicidal feel. It is dramatic. I love the visual of the leaves falling into the river and being carried away. Beautiful piece of poetry. Gretchen
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Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
I like your use of alliteration and consonance in this poem. Plum blossom symbolizes internal beauty and the fallen blossoms add Beauty to the river's rapids.
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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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I like your use of alliteration and consonance in this poem. Plum blossom symbolizes internal beauty and the fallen blossoms add Beauty to the river's rapids.
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Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much, big sister, i appreciate your kind review.
Love,
Marival