Saving Mr. Calvin
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Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Ah, young love! Such a sweet, innocent interaction between two people still young enough to "play" together; old enough to fall in love.
Delightful, Jim. And now the game of golf begins to spread . . .
Jim, I'm not sure if I mentioned this in my last review, but I think you should include all of your characters at the end and the "time zones" they live in to separate them.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2023
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Ah, young love! Such a sweet, innocent interaction between two people still young enough to "play" together; old enough to fall in love.
Delightful, Jim. And now the game of golf begins to spread . . .
Jim, I'm not sure if I mentioned this in my last review, but I think you should include all of your characters at the end and the "time zones" they live in to separate them.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2023
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Your first sentence is right on the mark, Pam. That's exactly how I see it. I'm so glad you are enjoying it.
Excellent suggestion about showing the characters in each time period. I will start doing that.
Comment from JSD
More excellent writing. A sweet little relationship blossoming here and most enjoyable to read. Thank you.
John
"Seeing through a glass darkly."
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2023
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More excellent writing. A sweet little relationship blossoming here and most enjoyable to read. Thank you.
John
"Seeing through a glass darkly."
Comment Written 07-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2023
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Thank you so much, John. We will see a lot more interaction between these two as this part of the story progresses.
Comment from jacquelyn popp
It is good to have a passion, and to use that in your writing. I really enjoyed reading your story. It was very interesting and kept me wanting to keep reading to the end. I am looking forward to reading more of your story, and other pieces that you write. I have always wanted to try and play golf, but have never gotten the chance. This story makes me want to really get out there and try it. I appreciate your explanation of the golf terms in your notes. There are very helpful in understanding the game of golf. Your story is very well written, and flows well. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2023
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It is good to have a passion, and to use that in your writing. I really enjoyed reading your story. It was very interesting and kept me wanting to keep reading to the end. I am looking forward to reading more of your story, and other pieces that you write. I have always wanted to try and play golf, but have never gotten the chance. This story makes me want to really get out there and try it. I appreciate your explanation of the golf terms in your notes. There are very helpful in understanding the game of golf. Your story is very well written, and flows well. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2023
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What a wonderful review, Jacquelyn. Thank you so much. I was a golfer for 60 years until some physical issues made me have to quit playing just a few months ago, but I keep my interest in the game ongoing by writing about it.
Comment from lyenochka
Kilian certainly earned some points with Arie by writing her a poem that describes her so favorably and in good meter. She seems very bright and daring. I hope Kilian knows what he's getting into with her. Hopefully, they're in a similar social class.
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Kilian certainly earned some points with Arie by writing her a poem that describes her so favorably and in good meter. She seems very bright and daring. I hope Kilian knows what he's getting into with her. Hopefully, they're in a similar social class.
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Comment Written 07-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2023
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She's a little pistol, alright, but also very kind as you will see in a few chapters. They are both in the peasant class, so no worries there.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
It's good to have a passion that you can write about it. I must confess I never played golf so I don't really understand the game. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2023
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It's good to have a passion that you can write about it. I must confess I never played golf so I don't really understand the game. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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Comment Written 07-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2023
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Thank you so much, Iza. If you stay with the story, you'll learn all about the game from the very earliest days. Pretty soon, it will start resembling more the game we play today.