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The Saga of Procrastination

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Comment from lancellot
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Hmm, interesting story.

notes. Some things to look for:

He continued {undisturbed:" Don't be surprised.} I see no ringy-dingy

-undisturbed, "Don't be surprised.

" So? You have one,

-"So? You have one,

I recommend checking the quote mark placements again.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
    Thank you so much for the corrections
Comment from country ranch writer
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Old boy thinks he is an answer to a cats prayers,... not!
Tell Mr.irresistible to take a long walk off a short pier. Our go down to local cat house and mingle his dingles.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
    What a funny comment I love it:)
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Your short story was funny. I enjoyed reading. I'm a little confused with your dialogue. Normally it would be written: He continued undisturbed, "Don't be surprised. I know you're from another country but my UK friends still use the comma but only a single quotation mark.

He continued undisturbed:" Don't be surprised. I see no ringy-dingy on your fingy." (quotation marks closer to 'Don't)

Mr. Irresistible continued in the same tone:" What? (quotation marks closer to 'What')

Amused I said:" So, who taught you this dating strategy? Aunt Sima?" (quotation marks closer to 'So')

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
    You are right we don't use quotations mark, but dialogue lines
Comment from JSD
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Amusing and tightly written. Good style and some excellent dialogue. I just think your last word should be 'mingling'. Otherwise well done.

John

"Seeing through a glass darkly."

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 Comment Written 06-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
    Ha, ha, ha nice one John:)
Comment from lyenochka
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LoL ! Good job keeping away those no-good-nik Don Juans who are only trying to mess with you and also being unfaithful to their wives! Glad you scared him off!

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 Comment Written 06-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
    thanks Helen:) always a pleasure and so sorry for the delay.
reply by lyenochka on 13-Oct-2024
    No worries! 💖 I know you're busy!