Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I've read other work you've shared on FS about your
daughter, Nomi. This is a heartfelt poem addressing
not only the visitation to see her but of the love you
had for her. You did a great job with the word choices,
the rhymes, the smooth flow, and the message. 'the notes
were super, too. My sincere condolences on the loss of
your beloved daughter, Jan

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023

Thank you Jan, your compassionate remarks are very much appreciated.

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Hi Norman,
This poem has both good end rhymes and internal rhymes in every third line. It tells how hard life can be. I am glad your daughter cleaned up her life before she died. Sorry for your losses. I am glad for both your daughter and your son,
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great rest of the week.
Joan

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023

Thank you Joan. It is always a pleasure to read your supportive comments.

reply by dragonpoet on 06-Jul-2023

Don't mention it, Norman.
Joan

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

I am glad your grandchildren are doing well and feel sorry that your daughter had such a difficult time shaking the addiction. She is at peace now and I'm sure she appreciated the support of both you and your wife.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023

Yes, there were some difficult days where we struggled to adjust to the troubled times that led to her incarceration. Somehow we survived. I thank you for your fine comments.

Comment from mermaids

Exceptional

I applaud your words. You give your daughter a voice and she did leave a lasting positive impact. I like the feelings you describe as you visited her in prison. I worked in the addiction field for fourteen years and it is such a devastating illness with a ripple effect on families. Excellent poetic form that is smooth and you have a strong steady beat.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023

Thank you so much. Those words come directly from a heart that will never be completely healed. She left a hole that will never be totally closed.

Comment from Terry Broxson

Excellent

Nomi, your poem is very well written. The rhythm is like a captivating soft drumbeat carrying the reader from line to line. The sadness of the story weighs heavy on my mind. The achievement of the next generation is not to be overlooked. Well done. Terry.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023

Thank you so much. I greatly appreciate your generous and supportive comments.

Comment from LJbutterfly

Excellent

You did what God intended you to do, and that is raise and nurture the daughter He blessed you with. However, evil forces changed your daughter's life. But you and your wife forged ahead and raised your daughter's children. This is an emotional piece that I know took courage to write and post. May God continue to bless you for doing His will despite challenges.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023

Thank you. It was a struggle, all the more because we feared history possibly repeating itself. Thank God it did not.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I know this had to be hard to write and post. I know God intervened and she turned her life around. She was lucky to have you and your wife there for her and her children. Thank you for sharing. I know it will help others in similar situations.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023

I pray that it does. Her late husband said that he could not wait to meet me because he often heard, "That is not how my dad would that, or that's not how my dad acts, etc."
It did my heart good to know that I was held up as a standard bearer.

reply by barbara.wilkey on 05-Jul-2023

As it should be.

Comment from Raul1

Excellent

I am so sorry to hear about your daughter. I hope that she overcomes drug addiction. You have written your poem well. Excellent work! I like it. Thank you for sharing!

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023

Thank you for your fine comments.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I'm so sad to read about your daughter but I admire your strength and courageous love for her. You show us how your faithful love opened the way for her children and kept them on His path. The evil one uses drugs to cause grief to so many. Thank you for sharing this hard story and for being strong for your family. Virtual six!

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023

Thank you for your kind, generous and compassionate comments. They mean a great deal to me.

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

I wish I had six stars to give you for this very well written and heart breaking poem about your daughter and her life. I am so sorry she is no longer with you, but thankful you have the ones that are left and you get to love and enjoy! Thank you for sharing your heart with us. May God bless you! Teri

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023

Thank you for your compassionate remarks. I am so thankful to be associated with such caring and generous spirited, talented people such as are found here on site.