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Letters to my granddaughters

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Comment from prettybluebirds
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I can relate to your story. My mother-in-law constantly interfered between my husband and me. I think it is a common thing with them. They feel that no one is good enough for their baby boy. Your story is nicely written.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2023


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Comment from lancellot
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Hmm, this is unlike some of the others is listed as General Fiction, so at first, I assumed it wasn't true. But the notes seem to counter that. You mention some limitations of a prompt. I don't know what that's about. But, if there is, then I understand, the lack of showing, examples, and including more tangible negative interactions with this character's mother-in-law. Because what we are told, doesn't appear to be significant. Also, we don't know why, this mother, would want her daughters to know this about their grandmother.

It is short (limited prompt) but I see no structural issues.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2023


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Comment from Sarah Tummey
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Thanks for sharing the advice you were given. I wonder what you mean by, "Consider the source". Life doesn't feel short to me and can be very upsetting at times.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2023
    The source being the person talking to you. Thank you for the kind support.
reply by Sarah Tummey on 01-Jul-2023
    Ah, ok. I thought you might have meant consider the source of her advice, I.E. the hurt or anger, or whatever/whoever was behind it.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
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At some point in my life I was given this advice and I have lived by it. Who knows what makes some people say insulting things? Maybe it makes them feel big, or more important. I had a sister-in-law that would be my friend one minute and insult me the nest. She was always trying to hurt me. This is good advice. "Consider the source and move on." Well done. Nancy:)

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2023


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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Mother-in-laws can be hard to get on with, but sometimes they will mellow a few years down the road. But some can be as nice as pie right from the start. Good lesson, Barbara. Sandra xx

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2023


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    You're correct. Thank you for the kind support.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
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Your goal for writing these stories is a good example for an idea for other writers. It was almost as if your grandmother was worried you'd outshine her. She was very insecure. My grandfather told my mother she was a failure with kids who were failures and a husband who was a failure. Everything of the opposite was true.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2023


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reply by Liz O'Neill on 01-Jul-2023
    I meant my grandmother...Both my grandfathers died before I was 5
Comment from dellsworthpoet
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A well-constructed lesson piece. The language is warm and conversational. The narrative stays on point. The images are clear and strong. The shortness of the narrative helps to keep the message crisp and memorable.

Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2023


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    You are welcome.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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These chapters are proving to be a valuable exercise in paring letters to the bone without losing information and keeping them interesting for your teenage granddaughters. You are managing this extraordinarily well. I would just like to know where these prompts originated from (I think I must have missed something at the beginning). kay

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2023


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Comment from Loretta Bigg
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Thank you for posting this at a time when I am having a difficult time with my cousin. It helps a lot to get this advice. I think you are missing a word after Thank You Google (wasn't sure if that was part of the story-- if not, ignore me.)

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2023


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Comment from w.j.debi
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I notice there is always a section for lessons learned. Is that part of the program or something you added? I like it. Thanks for sharing. I especially like the comment
Wait a minute! I'm just as much of a Wilkey as she is. She married into the family too.
I had never thought of it that way before, but it is so true.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2023
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