2023 Gypsy's Haiku
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Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Oh no. I've always been super sensitive I get so upset. I had like 11 Arthur found the rally unhappy days was going to jump over a bunch of cars I believe on the commercial break I prayed. So like I really hope everything's okay with that baby? Maybe it's just at the hospital getting some treatment? ;)
But enough about me
This is a really intriguing poem. after reading your author note I see it's like dark humor type of thing so it's really good. It's really an exception of poem. :)
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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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Oh no. I've always been super sensitive I get so upset. I had like 11 Arthur found the rally unhappy days was going to jump over a bunch of cars I believe on the commercial break I prayed. So like I really hope everything's okay with that baby? Maybe it's just at the hospital getting some treatment? ;)
But enough about me
This is a really intriguing poem. after reading your author note I see it's like dark humor type of thing so it's really good. It's really an exception of poem. :)
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Comment Written 27-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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it's a horror haiku. I am sorry if it upset you. The baby died, that is why the ride home was quiet and the baby stroller was full of grief.
Thank you for reading and reviewing my upsetting horror haiku. :)
Gypsy
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No no I figured That.
Now New Yorker voice for humor
Hey yo! What do I look like
ova here?
Some schmuck that can't handle the he empty carriage The baby died Bada bing badda bom. yo.
Lolololol
I laugh at serious or scary things
It's a completely good plan. :)
For horror it was on point!
Exceptional!
Comment from JT traveller
A terribly sad, well written poem that aches of grief. It reminded me of Hemingway's shortest story, "For sale: baby shoes, never worn."
An emotive write. Thank you. Jacqueline
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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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A terribly sad, well written poem that aches of grief. It reminded me of Hemingway's shortest story, "For sale: baby shoes, never worn."
An emotive write. Thank you. Jacqueline
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Comment Written 27-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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Hemingway's famous poem sounds like one of the first American haiku :) Thank you very much for the kind review.
gypsy