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One Man's Calling

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Following God

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Comment from prettybluebirds
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Your story is interesting and well-written. I did see some places where (at) might have sounded better than (to). Like Hanna's glance (to) her hand. (At) might have sounded better. It might be just the preference of the writer to choose either word. Nice story.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
    Thank you. And you demonstrate perfectly why I joined FanStory!
Comment from Jim Wile
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This was an enjoyable chapter, Wayne. Ben faces a difficult decision, and decides that he must follow his calling alone. He really is dedicated to have turned down the likes of Hanna.

It was interesting to see how Angelo is now lost in how to change his life around now that he has seen the light, but Ben seems to have pointed him in the right direction with his vision.

I also loved how you brought in the early days of professional baseball as well. I always though the White Stockings were the precursor to the White Sox, but you are correct; it's the Cubs.

Will there be a villain coming soon in this story? I think it could use one. - Jim

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 Comment Written 27-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
    Yes, villain. Thank you for pointing it out. I think we got to that decision at the same time.
    And thank you for your continued (continuing?) support.
Comment from JSD
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Fascinating. You keep your writing skirting between the borders between worldly things and spiritual. It is most effective. Bob is a most engaging character.

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 Comment Written 27-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
    Thank you. I appreciate your support.