Colours Prime
A Rhyming wave poem for the Potlach club15 total reviews
Comment from JSD
An interesting and thought-provoking piece. I do think it's 'palette' though, unless the US spelling is different? I like your metaphor of the effect of age on the colours of our life.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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An interesting and thought-provoking piece. I do think it's 'palette' though, unless the US spelling is different? I like your metaphor of the effect of age on the colours of our life.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Hi JSD Thank you and yes you are correct it is palette so thanks for that ( Although I did check the spelling prior to posting and my brain saw ll instead of tt so thanks for that pick up
Glad you enjoyed my metaphor of aging and colours
Cheers Chris
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I'm reading a few of these and this one is very enjoyable. Love the theme of colours and their importance throughout the stages of your life. The repetition is of course charming and musical so very satisfying for the reader! A great job! Thanks for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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I'm reading a few of these and this one is very enjoyable. Love the theme of colours and their importance throughout the stages of your life. The repetition is of course charming and musical so very satisfying for the reader! A great job! Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 26-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Hi Debbie Thank you and I enjoyed writing this, as I had not done this style before, so it made me think.
appreciate you review
Cheers Chris
Comment from Douglas Goff
That was interesting and very artistic. Seems like it was fun for you to create this!
It has a Doctor Sues feeling on one level. I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing your work!!!
D
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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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That was interesting and very artistic. Seems like it was fun for you to create this!
It has a Doctor Sues feeling on one level. I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing your work!!!
D
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Comment Written 26-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Hi D, Thanks so much for your review snd I did enjoy writing this it challenged my muse lol
I liked this style too
Cheers Chris
Comment from Paul Manton
Oh Chrissy, this is a lovely poem. It reminds of some Donovan or Julie Felix songs, way back. I haven't reviewed many repetition poems on this site, and you have to be confident to try them. When they go wrong, they crash and burn - but this is very assured and accomplished. It reads like a song, which is really unsurprising with this form.
Rhyme scheme is a simple aaab, three iambics with four beats, last line three beats - which I call a successful cadence - each stanza feels completed.
The lovely metaphor of linking colors to your life development works very well - white for the innocence of youth, then the various blending of colors and experiences - but what stands out in this poem is your optimism: the palette never fades. I wish that everyone could say that.
Thank you so much for writing this sunny poem.
Paul
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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Oh Chrissy, this is a lovely poem. It reminds of some Donovan or Julie Felix songs, way back. I haven't reviewed many repetition poems on this site, and you have to be confident to try them. When they go wrong, they crash and burn - but this is very assured and accomplished. It reads like a song, which is really unsurprising with this form.
Rhyme scheme is a simple aaab, three iambics with four beats, last line three beats - which I call a successful cadence - each stanza feels completed.
The lovely metaphor of linking colors to your life development works very well - white for the innocence of youth, then the various blending of colors and experiences - but what stands out in this poem is your optimism: the palette never fades. I wish that everyone could say that.
Thank you so much for writing this sunny poem.
Paul
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Comment Written 26-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Hi Paul Thank you for such a lovely review it was my first attempt at this style and I am so pleased you thought it a worthy read
I enjoy the challenges here on FS and like to extend my writing skills
Your comments gave made my day
Many Cheers. Christine
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Have a great week too, Chrissy.
Good luck with all your writing.
Paul
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Cheers
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You're welcome.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Hi Chrissy! This is beautiful true inspiring realistic and enjoyable. It is well written abd lyrical. I havent seen you in a while Hope all is well with you and yours. I love this style.
Exceptional! :)) Alex
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Hi Chrissy! This is beautiful true inspiring realistic and enjoyable. It is well written abd lyrical. I havent seen you in a while Hope all is well with you and yours. I love this style.
Exceptional! :)) Alex
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Hi Alex, Thank you very much for the sixer snd lovely words
I enjoy the potlach challenges
And this was an interesting style
No I have been a little busy of late doing a final edit on my first poetry book ?Quintessential Christine? due for release in July this year
It will be published by Shawline publishing.com
If you googled the title it will take you to the site as it is now
live so people can view it
I am thrilled with the final copy and can?t believe I will be a published author soon
Also I have a new grandson Harry he is 5 weeks old and very cute
So with everything happening have just got back here
Hope all is well with you too
Cheers Chrisxx
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I'm so glad to hear all of your good news!!! Congratulations to you and yours! God bless! And I will buy your book when it's ready!! So you have a preorder already! :)
I'm doing well, writing and painting a lot and enjoying the good weather. Your happy news made me smile too.
Cheers,
Alex xx
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Great to hear all is well your paintings are lovely and I shall catch up on your writing
You are a dear
Chrisxx
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Thank you so much!
:)) Alex xx
