A Mermaid Who Soars
fantasy16 total reviews
Comment from Sugarray77
I enjoyed reading your lovely poem. You did a good job in crafting a perfect verse that matches your photo and its lovely artwork. I enjoyed reading it!!
Melissa
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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I enjoyed reading your lovely poem. You did a good job in crafting a perfect verse that matches your photo and its lovely artwork. I enjoyed reading it!!
Melissa
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Thank you. Elaine
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A mermaid transforming into a dove is a neat and unique scene and I enjoyed your mystic and romantic story here. A fine post, much enjoyed, full of grace and magic, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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A mermaid transforming into a dove is a neat and unique scene and I enjoyed your mystic and romantic story here. A fine post, much enjoyed, full of grace and magic, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Thank you. Elaine
Comment from Lisasview
Seems there are issues with the advanced editor... I can not get rid of the double spacing in my poem Taken...
Maybe go back to the other editor and use 22 to make your font larger... I am going to try that now...Oh yes, and maybe change your font to another style...
Anyway, I did love your poem... I have two poems I want to post ...one about Nymphs and one about Faeries...
For now as I am new to this site I have a few posted ... Check out my Portfolio...
Lisa, now living in Spain
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Seems there are issues with the advanced editor... I can not get rid of the double spacing in my poem Taken...
Maybe go back to the other editor and use 22 to make your font larger... I am going to try that now...Oh yes, and maybe change your font to another style...
Anyway, I did love your poem... I have two poems I want to post ...one about Nymphs and one about Faeries...
For now as I am new to this site I have a few posted ... Check out my Portfolio...
Lisa, now living in Spain
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Thank you. Elaine
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You are more than welcome Elaine,
Lisasview
Comment from Paul Manton
Hello Mermaids. I haven't reviewed you before, bit I see that you are FanStory royalty! And you already discovered my famous Cat, so that makes us friends.
Rhymes on even lines but with a free rhythm to go with the free spirit of your soaring mermaid. Freedom seems to be the main idea in the poem - the ability to be what you want to be - she gets to choose which atavar she needs next, then brings the wisdom of her dove-life back into her sea world.
For me there is a background of Gaia in this poem - the wise goddess who protects our world - and the mermaid is one of her loyal ministers.
Thank you, mermaids for this beautiful poem.
Paul
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Hello Mermaids. I haven't reviewed you before, bit I see that you are FanStory royalty! And you already discovered my famous Cat, so that makes us friends.
Rhymes on even lines but with a free rhythm to go with the free spirit of your soaring mermaid. Freedom seems to be the main idea in the poem - the ability to be what you want to be - she gets to choose which atavar she needs next, then brings the wisdom of her dove-life back into her sea world.
For me there is a background of Gaia in this poem - the wise goddess who protects our world - and the mermaid is one of her loyal ministers.
Thank you, mermaids for this beautiful poem.
Paul
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Thank you for your thoughtful and detailed review. I appreciate your encouraging words. Elaine
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Welcome, Elaine
Comment from lancellot
This is very nice. It seems to speak of how much can be learned when viewing the world from a different perspective, and then sharing the knowledge with others. Sort of if Ariel became a dove.
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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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This is very nice. It seems to speak of how much can be learned when viewing the world from a different perspective, and then sharing the knowledge with others. Sort of if Ariel became a dove.
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Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Thank you. Elaine
Comment from judiverse
You're brave to read your poem for open mike night. This poem is so creative with its soaring mermaid. It would be quite a different experience from being in the sea. It's neat that she takes note of what it's like so she can tell the other sea creatures what it's like. It's certainly been a different experience for her, and she has learned from her soaring flight. Interesting idea. Smoothly rhymed. "Magic transforms her becoming a white dove." One possiblity would be "She becomes a white dove." judi
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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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You're brave to read your poem for open mike night. This poem is so creative with its soaring mermaid. It would be quite a different experience from being in the sea. It's neat that she takes note of what it's like so she can tell the other sea creatures what it's like. It's certainly been a different experience for her, and she has learned from her soaring flight. Interesting idea. Smoothly rhymed. "Magic transforms her becoming a white dove." One possiblity would be "She becomes a white dove." judi
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Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Thank you for reading and enjoying. I enjoy the open mic event. It is the last Thursday of the month. We are on youtube,Falmouth Community television open mic if you would like to check us out. Elaine
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You're welcome. I used to read poems at our poetry readings, but that ended with COVID. That's neat you have community television. judi
