Jesus Missed His Cue
Contest entry22 total reviews
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Well, you were right to not want to be chosen for the role of Jesus since you had no experience with stagehands and how they do not know what they are doing half of the time.
So, this story was enjoyable to read and I had a lot of fun picturing you as Jesus when the lights went up and you weren't there.
Thanks for the laughs and I will bet you won't be so anxious to choose a role in a play again.
Jesse
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Well, you were right to not want to be chosen for the role of Jesus since you had no experience with stagehands and how they do not know what they are doing half of the time.
So, this story was enjoyable to read and I had a lot of fun picturing you as Jesus when the lights went up and you weren't there.
Thanks for the laughs and I will bet you won't be so anxious to choose a role in a play again.
Jesse
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the great review, Jesse. The sad part was that the lights didn't even go up. The light guy new I wasn't ready yet and they all just motioned to the dark screen behind them. I'm sure the audience was a little baffled at that. Lol. I really appreciate the stars, friend. I'm glad you liked my little mishap. Have a great day.
Ron
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Yes, it was enjoyable to read.
Enjoy your Wednesday!
Jesse
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I like the tongue-in-cheek humor: "I really didn't want to because I was slightly overweight and I'd have to be shirtless for a bit. Jesus didn't have a protruding gut, after forty days of fasting, as far as I knew." This could be a foreshadowing: "Easter morning, everything was set up and rehearsed so it would all go gracefully smooth. & "Here's what happened though." A funny ending
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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I like the tongue-in-cheek humor: "I really didn't want to because I was slightly overweight and I'd have to be shirtless for a bit. Jesus didn't have a protruding gut, after forty days of fasting, as far as I knew." This could be a foreshadowing: "Easter morning, everything was set up and rehearsed so it would all go gracefully smooth. & "Here's what happened though." A funny ending
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the great review, Liz. Yeah, I couldn't really figure out how to get around the foreshadowing. What can you do? Lol. I really appreciate the stars, Liz. I'm glad you liked the piece.
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Ron
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Foreshadowing is a prized literary technique. It is synonymous with the ominous music in a movie or tv show. It is a valued technique to keep the reader involved. Do not try to avoid foreshadowing. It's great.
Comment from Dr. Nad
Wow, that was probably harrowing for you but kind of cool. Sounds like you got there just at the right time. I have heard people say a time two: "All's well that ends well." I'm glad you were able to get the blood all rubbed off. I think the resurrection did look better being clean and white rather than bloody and red. Good Read, God bless.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Wow, that was probably harrowing for you but kind of cool. Sounds like you got there just at the right time. I have heard people say a time two: "All's well that ends well." I'm glad you were able to get the blood all rubbed off. I think the resurrection did look better being clean and white rather than bloody and red. Good Read, God bless.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Thank you for great review, Dr. Nad. I really appreciate the generous stars, friend. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have yourself a great day.
Ron
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You?re most welcome Ron, it?s good to connect again after a number of years with me being in and out and mostly out of FanStory.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very humorous story, and I appreciated your humor in it. I wish you the very best in all of your writing. Maybe next time you will not miss your cue. Patricia. I'm
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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This is a very humorous story, and I appreciated your humor in it. I wish you the very best in all of your writing. Maybe next time you will not miss your cue. Patricia. I'm
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the great review and gracious stars, Patricia. I'm glad you liked my silly mishap.
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Ron
Comment from Terry Broxson
Dang, Ron, you should be an actor instead of a writer. They need good actors in Hollywood, especially fat, bald ones...wait a minute. I could apply too. I can't act, but I fit the role. Very funny story, good luck in the contest. Terry.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Dang, Ron, you should be an actor instead of a writer. They need good actors in Hollywood, especially fat, bald ones...wait a minute. I could apply too. I can't act, but I fit the role. Very funny story, good luck in the contest. Terry.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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I'm pretty well past my prime for being a movie star, that's for sure. LOL. Thank you for the great review and stop in, Terry. I appreciate it, my friend.
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Comment from Wendy G
Well done. Sounds like this was autobiographical and at least you did save the day after being chosen for such a special role! Well written.
Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Well done. Sounds like this was autobiographical and at least you did save the day after being chosen for such a special role! Well written.
Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Yes, this must have been close to 30 years ago but it's something I'll never forget. Lol. Thank you for the great review and stars, Wendy.
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Ron
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Now this was funny! I have to admit the image I have of the Resurrection is slightly altered. I wonder if the next year, you made sure to get a buzz cut!
So well told, I see this should be a contender!
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Now this was funny! I have to admit the image I have of the Resurrection is slightly altered. I wonder if the next year, you made sure to get a buzz cut!
So well told, I see this should be a contender!
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review, Mary. Yes, I doubt He came out of the tomb all shiny and clean but it made for a good show. Lol. I'm glad you liked my little story, Mary. Thank you again.
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Ron
Comment from Ulla
That was funny. Not only stage nerves, but something is always bound to go wrong. But in the end you managed to save the day and the performance. Good luck. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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That was funny. Not only stage nerves, but something is always bound to go wrong. But in the end you managed to save the day and the performance. Good luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the great review, Ulla. I appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked my little mishap. Have yourself a wonderful day.
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Ron
Comment from Paul Manton
DragonSkulls, I couldn't avoid reviewing this piece, because, when I was 16, I also got crucified in our Methodist Youth Theater competition. We chose a Mystery Play from the Middle Ages, so, from a precarious ladder to which I was lashed, I had to remember a hundred archaic lines of poetry.
Your story is funnier, and the fact that you didn't really want to do it makes you a bigger hero than me by some way. I liked the way you broke your story up into about a dozen paragraphs - that made it really easy to read.
At sixteen I wasn't allowed to have long hair, but I was certainly overweight -and on the cross with just a 'loin cloth' over my swimming trunks. We won the competition, but my best friend, who wasn't from my church just made one comment: 'I see Jesus is a little fat this year!'
At least you didn't suffer that indignity!
Best wishes,
Paul
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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DragonSkulls, I couldn't avoid reviewing this piece, because, when I was 16, I also got crucified in our Methodist Youth Theater competition. We chose a Mystery Play from the Middle Ages, so, from a precarious ladder to which I was lashed, I had to remember a hundred archaic lines of poetry.
Your story is funnier, and the fact that you didn't really want to do it makes you a bigger hero than me by some way. I liked the way you broke your story up into about a dozen paragraphs - that made it really easy to read.
At sixteen I wasn't allowed to have long hair, but I was certainly overweight -and on the cross with just a 'loin cloth' over my swimming trunks. We won the competition, but my best friend, who wasn't from my church just made one comment: 'I see Jesus is a little fat this year!'
At least you didn't suffer that indignity!
Best wishes,
Paul
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Lol. Yeah, I didn't have to memorize any lines at least. Haha. I was actually closer to 30 at the time but still...
Thank you for the great review, Paul. I really appreciate the generous stars and the stop in, friend. Glad you guys won the competition. Have yourself a great night.
Ron
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Thanks, Ron.
Good luck in all your writing.
Paul
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
That must have been quite a tense moment for you but you saved the day! And the congregation loved you so job done! Your contest entry reads well in clear text and you always guess something humorous is about to happen which makes the read all the more fun. Small edit - resurrection 6th line from bottom. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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That must have been quite a tense moment for you but you saved the day! And the congregation loved you so job done! Your contest entry reads well in clear text and you always guess something humorous is about to happen which makes the read all the more fun. Small edit - resurrection 6th line from bottom. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much for the great review and for catching the goof, Debbie. I fixed it. I dearly appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked my little ordeal. Have yourself a great day.
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Ron
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You're welcome, Ron.
