I told myself
Oh you are ... are you?19 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Oh I found this wonderfully written poem quite funny an also so endearing. One of the passages I liked is the third stanza. But the second one appealed to me as well. I'm a sailor after all. Good luck. Ulla;)))
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Oh I found this wonderfully written poem quite funny an also so endearing. One of the passages I liked is the third stanza. But the second one appealed to me as well. I'm a sailor after all. Good luck. Ulla;)))
Comment Written 17-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Ulla, thank you. I am pleased you enjoyed the glib humor.
Comment from Andrea Kepple
I like your approach to the poem. You do a good job making the comparisons through the poem. The poem makes a strong statement about the feelings being talked about without actually talking about the feelings.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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I like your approach to the poem. You do a good job making the comparisons through the poem. The poem makes a strong statement about the feelings being talked about without actually talking about the feelings.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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Andrea, thank you.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao poet, you now have 4 votes.
I like the way you executed this contest...it's creative and different and it made your entry a delightful read.
My favourite lines:
the pepper in my sneeze
the hiccup in my laughter
the sand in my shoes
the stain on my shirt
the burn on my tongue
the drool on my pillow
Ciao and stay safe!
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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Ciao poet, you now have 4 votes.
I like the way you executed this contest...it's creative and different and it made your entry a delightful read.
My favourite lines:
the pepper in my sneeze
the hiccup in my laughter
the sand in my shoes
the stain on my shirt
the burn on my tongue
the drool on my pillow
Ciao and stay safe!
Comment Written 17-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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Tempeste, Ciao and Grazie!
Comment from Wendy G
Lol. Very clever and humorous with a large variety of situations as you first describe some life experiences then move to the humorous aspects of yourself. Well done. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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Lol. Very clever and humorous with a large variety of situations as you first describe some life experiences then move to the humorous aspects of yourself. Well done. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 16-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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Wendy, thank you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It sounds like this person is truly in love here and I enjoyed all these analogies to confirm how much strong the love is, you made me smile with some of these statements! Ha ha ha, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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It sounds like this person is truly in love here and I enjoyed all these analogies to confirm how much strong the love is, you made me smile with some of these statements! Ha ha ha, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Dolly, I am glad this evoked as smile. Have a splendid weekend.
Comment from papa55mike
I believe my wife sees every one of those things in me. Especially the snore and drool. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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I believe my wife sees every one of those things in me. Especially the snore and drool. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 16-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Mike, thanks! We must run in the same herd...👍👍
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, Oh You Are, Are You?, seems to divide both the proposed positives of relationship with the perceived reality of what that connection affords.....
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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This free verse, Oh You Are, Are You?, seems to divide both the proposed positives of relationship with the perceived reality of what that connection affords.....
Comment Written 16-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Thanks so much, Bill.
Comment from Paul Manton
Dear friend, Congratulations on such a great poem. I really enjoyed reading it - but I was confused because this sounds more biographical than autobiographical. Either way, the four line stanzas with the half-rhyme on 2/4 works really well - and especially the bathos of the final word.
Good luck with all your future writing.
Paul
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Dear friend, Congratulations on such a great poem. I really enjoyed reading it - but I was confused because this sounds more biographical than autobiographical. Either way, the four line stanzas with the half-rhyme on 2/4 works really well - and especially the bathos of the final word.
Good luck with all your future writing.
Paul
Comment Written 16-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Thanks Paul
Comment from JSD
Very John Cooper Clarke. Google his most famous poem, 'I wanna be yours' if you don't know it. That is not to denigrate your poem. Very funny lines but also some excellent imagery and inversion, like lines 3 and 4, finishing off with the very human last line. Love it. Good luck.
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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Very John Cooper Clarke. Google his most famous poem, 'I wanna be yours' if you don't know it. That is not to denigrate your poem. Very funny lines but also some excellent imagery and inversion, like lines 3 and 4, finishing off with the very human last line. Love it. Good luck.
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Comment Written 16-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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I looked him up and laugh I did! Thanks JLR
