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Can faith guide our path?

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Comment from lyenochka
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What a great place to be - that bakery! It seems to be the heart of the community, where a pastor can show up and sign up "volunteer" teachers for his church's programs! Lol. And so much hugging! Love the way things are progressing but now I'm curious as to when Emma will call Seth by name...

 Comment Written 23-May-2023


reply by the author on 23-May-2023
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
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A sound half chapter. I saw no editing issues beyond some comma stuff, but we all struggle with those.

It was easy going chapter, nothing heavy or exciting so far, but this niceness and slow pace will appeal to your audience. Good work.

 Comment Written 22-May-2023


reply by the author on 23-May-2023
    I hate commas. I can handle the easy normal commas, but in some areas, I never get them right. I've also come to realize with professional editors, they disagree on commas too. LOl Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from estory
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Super job with the dialogue, as always. Everybody is true to character, you have great personalities in each character and we see their sense of humor and apprehensions, their hidden desires, their idiosyncrasies in all the dialogue. Great push and pull tension in there too. My only nit is that it could move along faster. You don't need to dwell on all this application of sunscreen for this long. estory

 Comment Written 22-May-2023


reply by the author on 22-May-2023
    The sunburn scenes will be important. I promise. I wouldn't have it there if it wasn't. Please be patient and give it time. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from GWHARGIS
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I wonder what is going on in Emma's head. Not sure why she didn't answer him. Maybe she's not as interested as him. Maybe she's afraid. Anyway, she might want to start acting a little more interested. I seem to remember a woman at the station who has a thing for him. Great chapter. Gretchen

 Comment Written 22-May-2023


reply by the author on 22-May-2023
    Yes, Peggy does have a thing for Seth. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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I wonder why Emma didn't answer his question about being on first name terms. I'm thinking it might have something to do with that car that Sam keeps seeing up the lane. But everyone else says her name out clearly, so it couldn't be that. You've got me thinking now, Barbara, what can possibly be the reason? A mystery! Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 22-May-2023


reply by the author on 22-May-2023
    Emma doesn't know about the car. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from damommy
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Has it only been 10 days?! I agree it's time to use first names. Maybe she'll soon tell why she doesn't. I can't imagine how she will fit in all the activities on Wednesdays.

 Comment Written 22-May-2023


reply by the author on 22-May-2023
    It will all come out in the wash. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
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I can't decide if things are moving quickly or if it's my mind reading things into what isn't really happening. LOL. But at any rate, you do have a way of putting me to thinking. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 22-May-2023


reply by the author on 22-May-2023
    Thank you. I've missed you. I hope you're doing well.
Comment from saipureddy chandrasekhar
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I apologize, but I am unable to offer a comment or analysis on "Faith Chapter 10 A" due to the lack of specific information regarding its content or context. I would be happy to try to assist you further if you could provide additional details or context.

 Comment Written 22-May-2023


reply by the author on 22-May-2023
    This is chapter 12. I think you'd understand it better if you had read the previous chapters. I do appreciate you stopping by. I hope you do so again.
Comment from Wendy G
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They met only ten days previously? It seemed like longer. There must be some explanation for her reticence in being on first name terms with him, especiallyconsidering she's attending to his burned back. An interesting chapter, as life flows on.
Wendy

 Comment Written 22-May-2023


reply by the author on 22-May-2023
    I think she's just unsure of herself. We'll find out. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
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I thought this was a comfortable read. I only had one suggestion on a line or two:
Watching the tip of Seth's ears tinge pink Carl asked, "Emma, I'm surprised you didn't stop him?"
I would say:
Watching the tip of Seth's ears tinge pink, Carl asked, "Emma, I'm surprised. How come you didn't stop him?"

 Comment Written 21-May-2023


reply by the author on 22-May-2023
    Thank you for the suggestion. I always appreciate help.