The Soul Collector
He works through deceit to achieve his goal.34 total reviews
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a solid entry for the Borrowed Rhyme contest. The borrowed words have been well utilised to weave into a biblical story. Very good use of creative imagination. I expect this entry to do well. Good luck :-)
reply by the author on 30-May-2023
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This is a solid entry for the Borrowed Rhyme contest. The borrowed words have been well utilised to weave into a biblical story. Very good use of creative imagination. I expect this entry to do well. Good luck :-)
Comment Written 30-May-2023
reply by the author on 30-May-2023
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Thank you so much for a nice review and comments.
Comment from Eternal Muse
What a beautiful spiritual poem, and I wish I had a six for it.
Great rhymes, flow, presentation, creative imagery and visuals make this a wonderful piece to read and review.
Thanks so much for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-May-2023
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What a beautiful spiritual poem, and I wish I had a six for it.
Great rhymes, flow, presentation, creative imagery and visuals make this a wonderful piece to read and review.
Thanks so much for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-May-2023
reply by the author on 29-May-2023
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Thank you for an excellent review. I really appreciate your comments.
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Very good poem overall. It talks about the original sin instigated by none other than the devil. The poem runs fluidly, even with the imposed ending words. Good luck with the contest!!!
reply by the author on 29-May-2023
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Very good poem overall. It talks about the original sin instigated by none other than the devil. The poem runs fluidly, even with the imposed ending words. Good luck with the contest!!!
Comment Written 29-May-2023
reply by the author on 29-May-2023
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Thank you so much Mario, I really appreciate the nice review and comments.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, The Soul Collector, is different in that the end words have been unilaterally established and bend the theme to the dark side. I think you have used them well here to capitalize on these conditions. The theme of the Great Pretender, Satan, comes through.
reply by the author on 29-May-2023
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This poem, The Soul Collector, is different in that the end words have been unilaterally established and bend the theme to the dark side. I think you have used them well here to capitalize on these conditions. The theme of the Great Pretender, Satan, comes through.
Comment Written 29-May-2023
reply by the author on 29-May-2023
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Thanks for a nice review and affirming commentst. I appreciate it.
Comment from Andrea Kepple
Nicely done. Good use of the words required in the contest to convey your message within the poem. I like how each line seems to be driving to the end word. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 29-May-2023
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Nicely done. Good use of the words required in the contest to convey your message within the poem. I like how each line seems to be driving to the end word. Best of luck.
Comment Written 29-May-2023
reply by the author on 29-May-2023
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Thank you so much for the review and comments.
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! You did a super job with this challenge! I read the poem then saw the requirements and I couldn't have known that you had to create a poem using those specific rhymes. You told the story of the Fall because of the evil one so naturally using all these words!
Hope this does well in the contest!!
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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Wow! You did a super job with this challenge! I read the poem then saw the requirements and I couldn't have known that you had to create a poem using those specific rhymes. You told the story of the Fall because of the evil one so naturally using all these words!
Hope this does well in the contest!!
Comment Written 27-May-2023
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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Thank you, Helen. It was fun to try to use those words. I hadn't planned it to be about Lucifer but it seemed to work out that way.
Beth
Comment from Elizabeth Henderson
Excellent poem. Well written with no grammar issues. The choice of the accompanying picture is very good. I like your title. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-May-2023
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Excellent poem. Well written with no grammar issues. The choice of the accompanying picture is very good. I like your title. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-May-2023
reply by the author on 21-May-2023
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Thank you Elizabeth. I'm so glad you liked my poem. I appreciate the review and comments.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I read the prompt for this poem and thought it sounded both challenging and fun. You've done a really good job here - you tell a story concisely without it sounding forced, which would have been easy to do since you're trying to fit each word into a line somehow.
Excellent job! Good luck:-)
Pam
reply by the author on 21-May-2023
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I read the prompt for this poem and thought it sounded both challenging and fun. You've done a really good job here - you tell a story concisely without it sounding forced, which would have been easy to do since you're trying to fit each word into a line somehow.
Excellent job! Good luck:-)
Pam
Comment Written 21-May-2023
reply by the author on 21-May-2023
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Thank you Pam. I appreciate the review and commentss. It was both a challenge and fun to write. I didn't plan to write about Satan but it just seem to drift in that direction.
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I could joke about that (I didn't plan to write about Satan but it just seemed to drift in that direction), but I won't. We all drift toward sin . . .
Well written. Again, good luck.
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Thisis true. I hope I didn''t do hime favors writing about him.
Comment from harmony13
I found the author's words presented so well. The poem is engaging,
descriptive and creative. I liked the words above the title - they are
so accurate. The poem is reminder of how evil works! The poem flows
and connects well. The artwork goes so well with the theme and words
of this poem. Have a great Sunday!....Maria
reply by the author on 21-May-2023
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I found the author's words presented so well. The poem is engaging,
descriptive and creative. I liked the words above the title - they are
so accurate. The poem is reminder of how evil works! The poem flows
and connects well. The artwork goes so well with the theme and words
of this poem. Have a great Sunday!....Maria
Comment Written 21-May-2023
reply by the author on 21-May-2023
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THnak you Maria. I really appreciate the great review and ;you thoughtful comments.
Comment from Cathy M
Your rhymes have meaning and the rest of the poem is the tier that holds it together. The great pretender is just that a pretender, telling you how happy you will be by following him and your poem tells that story.
reply by the author on 21-May-2023
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Your rhymes have meaning and the rest of the poem is the tier that holds it together. The great pretender is just that a pretender, telling you how happy you will be by following him and your poem tells that story.
Comment Written 21-May-2023
reply by the author on 21-May-2023
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Than you Cathy, I really appreciate the review and your thoughtful comments.