Keep Calm
Loop poem about finding comfort.19 total reviews
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Lisa A really nice loop poem not forced and flowed well I think at times we can all feel a little left field and then something redirects our path and we get back on track
A calmness is often found in the smallest of things
Nice wording and presentation
Cheers. Chrisxx
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Hi Lisa A really nice loop poem not forced and flowed well I think at times we can all feel a little left field and then something redirects our path and we get back on track
A calmness is often found in the smallest of things
Nice wording and presentation
Cheers. Chrisxx
Comment Written 01-May-2023
Comment from Wendy G
A beautiful poem flowing beautifully and coming full circle with resolution as one finds hope and light after grief and darkness. The image is a perfect accompaniment. Very best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 01-May-2023
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A beautiful poem flowing beautifully and coming full circle with resolution as one finds hope and light after grief and darkness. The image is a perfect accompaniment. Very best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 01-May-2023
reply by the author on 01-May-2023
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Thank you for your wonderful review Wendy. The 6 stars have lit up my day.
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Good. Very well deserved. To keep a good flow, and to make it meaningful as well as following the Loop requirements is not very easy. Well done.
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Thank you so much. Have a nice night.
Comment from lyenochka
Your loop poem is so beautifully soothing and calming! And you looped through five stanzas! Brava! My favorite lines were the last three lines - the realization of how we often harm ourselves and the need for love God and keep calm and humble before Him. I think this will do well in the contest!
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Your loop poem is so beautifully soothing and calming! And you looped through five stanzas! Brava! My favorite lines were the last three lines - the realization of how we often harm ourselves and the need for love God and keep calm and humble before Him. I think this will do well in the contest!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2023
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine loop here as these words are meditative and soothing and keeping calm in a crisis is not easy and when we get anxious we suffer mentally and physically. Your poem is calming and tranquil and I shall remind myself of your words next time trouble knocks my door, love Dolly x
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A fine loop here as these words are meditative and soothing and keeping calm in a crisis is not easy and when we get anxious we suffer mentally and physically. Your poem is calming and tranquil and I shall remind myself of your words next time trouble knocks my door, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Apr-2023
Comment from Mary Vigasin
I have to say this is an exquisite loop poem. I can only imagine how difficult it must be, and you did a beautiful job.
I was particularly taken by this passage:
"Hope that through darkness there is always light
Light on the pathway and light on my feet
Feet that will follow safe passage each plight."
It is calming and hopeful.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Mary
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I have to say this is an exquisite loop poem. I can only imagine how difficult it must be, and you did a beautiful job.
I was particularly taken by this passage:
"Hope that through darkness there is always light
Light on the pathway and light on my feet
Feet that will follow safe passage each plight."
It is calming and hopeful.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 30-Apr-2023
Comment from Ginda Simpson
You have done such a fine job with this loop poem. I don't imagine they are easy to write with a smooth flow. But yours flows very nicely and with beautiful imagery and feeling. Well done!
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You have done such a fine job with this loop poem. I don't imagine they are easy to write with a smooth flow. But yours flows very nicely and with beautiful imagery and feeling. Well done!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2023
Comment from Nancie E Kovacs
Very pretty.
I liked the movement of this
The words
Seemed to easily flow out of my mouth
Nice color choices as well.
I enjoyed reading this a lot!:))
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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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Very pretty.
I liked the movement of this
The words
Seemed to easily flow out of my mouth
Nice color choices as well.
I enjoyed reading this a lot!:))
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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Thanks for your review. Do you have any suggestions for improvement please?
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I wish I had more to offer but I fear I am no expert. I enjoyed it alot. Seems to flow very nicely. Good luck
Comment from royowen
There's been quite a few of these, and there's me having never written one. But this one is a genuine loop poem, with the truly traditional alternate rhyme and an excellent narrative, and a skilfully written and melodic theme. Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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There's been quite a few of these, and there's me having never written one. But this one is a genuine loop poem, with the truly traditional alternate rhyme and an excellent narrative, and a skilfully written and melodic theme. Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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Thanks Roy. I personally don't like the repetition of a loop poem - it feels unnecessary - but it is an interesting exercise.
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Yes it is
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Good loop poetry. Very descriptive words full of good imagery. Your words grew darker which was interesting. Poetry is a blessing and a way to express while also putting our troubles in perspective. Good work!
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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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Good loop poetry. Very descriptive words full of good imagery. Your words grew darker which was interesting. Poetry is a blessing and a way to express while also putting our troubles in perspective. Good work!
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Comment Written 30-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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Thanks for your thoughtful review. I wanted to shift from light to dark and back again, so thanks for noticing.