Like A Thief In The Night
2nd Place.29 total reviews
Comment from Jane Jane King
Very poignant and compelling piece. The surprise ending is very chilling and makes it all come together in a sad but impactful way. Very well written and clever piece.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
Very poignant and compelling piece. The surprise ending is very chilling and makes it all come together in a sad but impactful way. Very well written and clever piece.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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Thank you. These flashes are fun.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Falling in love and finding out it is with the wrong person is painful. In just a few words you told a striking story that began with a mystery. As the story developed, we find that the stolen item can never be returned. The loosing party must TAKE the item back. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
Falling in love and finding out it is with the wrong person is painful. In just a few words you told a striking story that began with a mystery. As the story developed, we find that the stolen item can never be returned. The loosing party must TAKE the item back. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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All in 75 Words. Good times!
Comment from Jim Wile
Excellent job with this flash story. She has stolen something very important and private to him, probably a diary, and the bitch won't give it back. He will have to do something equally preposterous so that they will have to trade in order for him to get it back. I like the way you left it. Great, appropriate picture too. Jim
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
Excellent job with this flash story. She has stolen something very important and private to him, probably a diary, and the bitch won't give it back. He will have to do something equally preposterous so that they will have to trade in order for him to get it back. I like the way you left it. Great, appropriate picture too. Jim
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Jim!
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Good job! Very amusing. I was thinking
you might be talking about your dog until
I finally read it was your heart that was
missing. Great picture. Good Luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
Good job! Very amusing. I was thinking
you might be talking about your dog until
I finally read it was your heart that was
missing. Great picture. Good Luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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Thanks Nancy. It was tied last time I looked. Now I?m too chicken. Gonna wait for it to end! Ha.
Comment from Julie Lau
This is a lovely little story. The use of language is excellent and the build-up to the grand reveal is faultless. You had me guessing right up until the final sentence. Excellent writing! Julie Lau
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
This is a lovely little story. The use of language is excellent and the build-up to the grand reveal is faultless. You had me guessing right up until the final sentence. Excellent writing! Julie Lau
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Julie. Some people thought it was going to be a dog that was stolen. We shall see how it does!
Comment from lyenochka
You kept me guessing all throughout the story! Could it be a favorite hat or t-shirt. Ex-girlfriends are known for taking off with apparel. But at the end we learn she stole the narrator's heart. Well told! Hope this does well in the contest!!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
You kept me guessing all throughout the story! Could it be a favorite hat or t-shirt. Ex-girlfriends are known for taking off with apparel. But at the end we learn she stole the narrator's heart. Well told! Hope this does well in the contest!!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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Thanks, my friend! Last time I checked it was tied for first. Now I?m too chicken to check. Just gonna wait for it to end. As always, the fun was in the creating of it! Blessings.
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I see you won second place! Congrats!
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Not a bad little run! Thanks!
Comment from Kerry Foley
This is a fantastic entry for the 75 word contest!
Argggg..that's walking the plank, Mate. Lol
Great ending.
I love the curiosity in it.
Good luck, my friend
- Kerry
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
This is a fantastic entry for the 75 word contest!
Argggg..that's walking the plank, Mate. Lol
Great ending.
I love the curiosity in it.
Good luck, my friend
- Kerry
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Thanks! You never know how these things will go, especially in FS. Still, the joy is in the writing. I?m
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Well, you had my vote
Comment from karenina
Very clever... You had me guessing, for sure!
Our hearts...the biggest treasure we have to offer... (May they never be plundered!)
A witty yet poignant 75 word story!
Karenina
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
Very clever... You had me guessing, for sure!
Our hearts...the biggest treasure we have to offer... (May they never be plundered!)
A witty yet poignant 75 word story!
Karenina
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Ha! I see what you did there with plundered! My little piece was doing well last time I checked. I think most people can relate!
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Great news! Happy to hear it!
Comment from Mia Twysted
I love the way you kept the reader wondering what it was. You can feel the pull of attraction as you are wrapped in a soft, warm blanket while you cuddle by the fire.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
I love the way you kept the reader wondering what it was. You can feel the pull of attraction as you are wrapped in a soft, warm blanket while you cuddle by the fire.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Thank you my friend. I think most people can relate to this. We shall see how it does.
Comment from jessizero
This was a great story in just seventy-five words. I like the way you wrote of her mangling the heart in question as if it were physically being injured instead of emotionally. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
This was a great story in just seventy-five words. I like the way you wrote of her mangling the heart in question as if it were physically being injured instead of emotionally. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
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Thank you! Seems to be resonating well with people in the competition. I think we?ve all been there. Victim or not of a love thief?.