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Comment from Jim Wile
This is a beautiful, eerie, and mysterious poem about a woman whose love is lost in blood and tears, as she finds it difficult to write about it.
Why was it lost, and what's the significance of blood to the loss? Is it her blood that he caused to be shed? Was it his blood that's been shed from a grievous wound? I would opt for her blood that's been shed because of the "dying love." Or perhaps it's merely a symbol of a wound between them that just won't heal?
Who knows? and that's the beauty of it. It opens the mind to many possibilities in this wonderful poem so attractively presented. Great job! Jim
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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This is a beautiful, eerie, and mysterious poem about a woman whose love is lost in blood and tears, as she finds it difficult to write about it.
Why was it lost, and what's the significance of blood to the loss? Is it her blood that he caused to be shed? Was it his blood that's been shed from a grievous wound? I would opt for her blood that's been shed because of the "dying love." Or perhaps it's merely a symbol of a wound between them that just won't heal?
Who knows? and that's the beauty of it. It opens the mind to many possibilities in this wonderful poem so attractively presented. Great job! Jim
Comment Written 18-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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You are right, Jim. Japanese poetry is all about creating a visual mental picture with a few words of a moment in time. I find it fascinating because I am an artist.
to answer your questions....
Q = Why was it lost? A = it can be any kind of separation... death, divorce, growing apart.... whatever means to you.
Q = what's the significance of blood to the loss? A = for some, at the end of a relationship it hurts so much it feels like your heart is breaking ... to me red ink is a metaphor of painful emotions.
Q = Is it her blood that he caused to be shed? A= no he caused pain that feels so raw and like you are dying. I've been in that situation, when a person is cut you can see the blood, but when a person is hurt emotionally...nobody sees the blood and grief.
Q = was it his blood that's been shed from a grievous wound? I would opt for her blood that's been shed because of the "dying love." Or perhaps it's merely a symbol of a wound between them that just won't heal? A= It can be both. Some people are so devastated by the end of the relationship that they try to kill themselves...maybe cut her wrists. You decide that for yourself.
Thank you very much, Jim. I really appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mary Vigasin
You have made your reader feel the pain and sorrow of this break-up. A hauntingly beautiful tanka in words and presentation.
Well done. Certainly deserve s a six
Best wishes
Mary
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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You have made your reader feel the pain and sorrow of this break-up. A hauntingly beautiful tanka in words and presentation.
Well done. Certainly deserve s a six
Best wishes
Mary
Comment Written 18-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much, Mary. I really appreciate your exceptional six stars review!
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
i feel like the girl is staring at me... menacingly! LOL
this was a great tanka about writing how much you love someone but words just can't match up with the outpouring
those last two lines are excellent!!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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i feel like the girl is staring at me... menacingly! LOL
this was a great tanka about writing how much you love someone but words just can't match up with the outpouring
those last two lines are excellent!!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 18-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much, Shelley. I really appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Ginda Simpson
The quote you included in your author's note is so true about the healing power of poetry. Your words of heartbreak in this poem are deeply felt by the poet and then by her readers. Great work.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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The quote you included in your author's note is so true about the healing power of poetry. Your words of heartbreak in this poem are deeply felt by the poet and then by her readers. Great work.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much, Ginda. I really appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Douglas Goff
Hauntingly wonderful. I hope that I've never. left any women like that. Ya know, minus all the stalkers.
Good work! Great coloring that is sympathetic to your words. The crying eye picture is the cherry on top of your poetry sundae.
You, my friend, are a magical unicorn!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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Hauntingly wonderful. I hope that I've never. left any women like that. Ya know, minus all the stalkers.
Good work! Great coloring that is sympathetic to your words. The crying eye picture is the cherry on top of your poetry sundae.
You, my friend, are a magical unicorn!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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LoL I love to be a magical unicorn, thank you, Douglas. You made me smile. Thank you very much, Douglas. I really appreciate your exceptional six stars review!
Gypsy, the magical unicorn
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Well I love the gorgeous poem you have written! Speak to me about Sadness fear a message of decision and warning. Your voice is clear and concise Waylaying the message without confusion.
I find it to be well written and when I read aloud it falls well off my tunnel. I find no issues with the aesthetics all good.
Thank you so much for your submission and good luck and I wish you a great day!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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Well I love the gorgeous poem you have written! Speak to me about Sadness fear a message of decision and warning. Your voice is clear and concise Waylaying the message without confusion.
I find it to be well written and when I read aloud it falls well off my tunnel. I find no issues with the aesthetics all good.
Thank you so much for your submission and good luck and I wish you a great day!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much, Lea. I really appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from juliaSjames
Cleverly composed and dramatic tanka, which makes a deep impression on the reader. The "quill deep ..." line is particularly creative. I get the impression that the actions of one or both of the lovers have killed their love, because there is horror as well as grief in this tanka.
Thanks for sharing your creativity and skill.
Blessings, Julia
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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Cleverly composed and dramatic tanka, which makes a deep impression on the reader. The "quill deep ..." line is particularly creative. I get the impression that the actions of one or both of the lovers have killed their love, because there is horror as well as grief in this tanka.
Thanks for sharing your creativity and skill.
Blessings, Julia
Comment Written 17-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from aryr
That was a great tanka, Gypsy. The dual pictures were of your pain and of your belief. Your words zeroed in on the pain, the anger and the loss. Very well done and sadly but greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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That was a great tanka, Gypsy. The dual pictures were of your pain and of your belief. Your words zeroed in on the pain, the anger and the loss. Very well done and sadly but greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback. Blessed be.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from kahpot
A beautiful Tanka, to me it reads a bit sad as the character seems quite confused between love and fear, (that's just my thought) very well written and presented****kahpot
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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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A beautiful Tanka, to me it reads a bit sad as the character seems quite confused between love and fear, (that's just my thought) very well written and presented****kahpot
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Comment Written 17-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
That's a powerful poem and it shows us the deep pain of a "dying love." The red and black presentation is stunning as is the "quill deep" phrase which expresses the poet's pain.
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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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That's a powerful poem and it shows us the deep pain of a "dying love." The red and black presentation is stunning as is the "quill deep" phrase which expresses the poet's pain.
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Comment Written 17-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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Thank you, big sister. I always appreciate your insightful review. Love ya.
Marival ❤️