Love and Loss
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Her Words"NaPoWriMo April Poetry Contest
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A wonderful watershed moment! A conversation between mother and daughter conveyed skilfully and authentically in rhyming verse. A great affirmation of the relationship (stanzas 2 and the finale) Thanks for sharing, Debbie
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
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A wonderful watershed moment! A conversation between mother and daughter conveyed skilfully and authentically in rhyming verse. A great affirmation of the relationship (stanzas 2 and the finale) Thanks for sharing, Debbie
Comment Written 16-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, Debbie!
<3
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a touching write Jessica and and I adored the sentiments. Good end rhymes throughout. With a little tweaking the metre would be perfect, but as it is the flow is interrupted in places. A concentration on the stresses would give your poem the edge, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
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This is a touching write Jessica and and I adored the sentiments. Good end rhymes throughout. With a little tweaking the metre would be perfect, but as it is the flow is interrupted in places. A concentration on the stresses would give your poem the edge, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 15-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much!
Xo
Comment from Lea Tonin1
What a lovely story with your beautiful and wise daughter! Your rhyming scheme is very good with a fine grasp at word selection.
I find no grammatical errors and I find. It also very aesthetically closing a very nice package all wrapped up into a lovely submission.
Thank you so much I wish you all the best and have a great evening!
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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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What a lovely story with your beautiful and wise daughter! Your rhyming scheme is very good with a fine grasp at word selection.
I find no grammatical errors and I find. It also very aesthetically closing a very nice package all wrapped up into a lovely submission.
Thank you so much I wish you all the best and have a great evening!
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Comment Written 15-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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Thank you Lea!!xoxo
Comment from Ricky1024
Share A Story contest Entry Entry.
Rich in Theme design and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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My Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional, while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing this Jessica and good luck with your contest Entry.
Doctor Ricky1024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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Share A Story contest Entry Entry.
Rich in Theme design and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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My Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional, while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing this Jessica and good luck with your contest Entry.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment Written 15-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, I'm truly grateful for your valued review!!
Comment from K.I. Betancur
Absolutely beautiful!
I don't know if this is a personal story or someone else's or purely fiction, but you really brought the emotion to life in this piece.
We don't know how "Aunt Kelly" passed, or any of the details surrounding the relationship the mother had with her, but it pales in comparison to knowing that the mother is finally allowing herself to get some sort of reprieve from holding in these emotions from her daughter.
Therapy's best when there's a death in the family, depending on how close the relationship was. It truly helps.
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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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Absolutely beautiful!
I don't know if this is a personal story or someone else's or purely fiction, but you really brought the emotion to life in this piece.
We don't know how "Aunt Kelly" passed, or any of the details surrounding the relationship the mother had with her, but it pales in comparison to knowing that the mother is finally allowing herself to get some sort of reprieve from holding in these emotions from her daughter.
Therapy's best when there's a death in the family, depending on how close the relationship was. It truly helps.
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Comment Written 15-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much!! I've added an author's note to clear things up! I greatly appreciate your review
<3
Jessica
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Thank you for doing so!