Lost Years
Ignoring what matters, leads to loneliness.17 total reviews
Comment from JT traveller
It appears that you have put a lot of thought into this words and it shows. An extremely heartfelt read that comes with a message, do not ignore what is right in front of you for someday it may be gone. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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It appears that you have put a lot of thought into this words and it shows. An extremely heartfelt read that comes with a message, do not ignore what is right in front of you for someday it may be gone. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for the review and the comment on my poem.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like a visitation by a ghost in a dream or nightmare here, hearing voices and being isolated sounds like deep depression, many suffer from mental illness these days, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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This sounds like a visitation by a ghost in a dream or nightmare here, hearing voices and being isolated sounds like deep depression, many suffer from mental illness these days, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Thank you Dolly, I appreciate the review. The poem isn't about me. I'm, not at all, lonely.
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That is good to hear x x x
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Very good. I enjoyed your writing. In just the few lines, it caused me to feel a connection, from my own experiences in life. The idea of sitting alone with your memory of once vibrant times, now a punishment. That is how I perceived your poem. Now I have trouble walking at times, from MS, so I do feel that way, sometimes, when I think of how I use to walk well and even run I hope I understand well. Still writing to which, a reader can feel a connection, is good writing! :))
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Very good. I enjoyed your writing. In just the few lines, it caused me to feel a connection, from my own experiences in life. The idea of sitting alone with your memory of once vibrant times, now a punishment. That is how I perceived your poem. Now I have trouble walking at times, from MS, so I do feel that way, sometimes, when I think of how I use to walk well and even run I hope I understand well. Still writing to which, a reader can feel a connection, is good writing! :))
Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Thank you Alexandra, I glad you liked the poem. I'm sorry you suffer from MS. I have trouble walking too but mine is bad knees, I think I inheirted from my father and grandfather. I'm not really lonely but getting older brings memories of better days. The poem is really about me, but I know people who seem to be this lonely.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is beautifully expressed in a verse of such limited length. The imagery of "shadows," "ghosts" and "empty shell" strongly convey an overwhelming and poignant sense of loss and loneliness. It flowed well in its free verse form. Well done and good luck in the contest, Debbie
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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This is beautifully expressed in a verse of such limited length. The imagery of "shadows," "ghosts" and "empty shell" strongly convey an overwhelming and poignant sense of loss and loneliness. It flowed well in its free verse form. Well done and good luck in the contest, Debbie
Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Debbie. I'm glad you liked my poem and feel it conveys a sense of loneliness.
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, Lost Years, brings the poet and the reader together to ponder how all the connections to a fuller life could be ignored until one finds him/herself alone.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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This free verse, Lost Years, brings the poet and the reader together to ponder how all the connections to a fuller life could be ignored until one finds him/herself alone.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Bill. I've known a few who realized late in life, they could have had a richer life if they'd spent more time with family and freinds.
Comment from Mintybee
This free verse poem captures a feeling of loneliness with phrases like, "I hear hollow voices of the past/ echoing like souls lost in limbo," and, "Time denies reprieve from this empty shell." The stanza breaks make sense as each stanza contains a complete thought. The images are clear and interesting. I don't like the ellipses, as they seem redundant when you have a line break to separate the phrases, but that may be more of an artistic difference than a real complaint. This is a well done poem.
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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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This free verse poem captures a feeling of loneliness with phrases like, "I hear hollow voices of the past/ echoing like souls lost in limbo," and, "Time denies reprieve from this empty shell." The stanza breaks make sense as each stanza contains a complete thought. The images are clear and interesting. I don't like the ellipses, as they seem redundant when you have a line break to separate the phrases, but that may be more of an artistic difference than a real complaint. This is a well done poem.
Mintybee
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Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Mintybee. I appreciate your review and comments. I agree, I don't really need the ellipses so I removed them. I'm glad think I captured a feeling of loneliness.
Comment from royowen
I think this poetic utterance could well apply to anyone, but I'll say, if I were to go back, I couldn't really change them anyway, it's like an invented pattern, you would just be playing with futility. But I think most ponderers would consider the same. But there's no denying the beauty of the write, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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I think this poetic utterance could well apply to anyone, but I'll say, if I were to go back, I couldn't really change them anyway, it's like an invented pattern, you would just be playing with futility. But I think most ponderers would consider the same. But there's no denying the beauty of the write, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Roy. I appreciate the reveiw and comments. I don't consider it biographical because I'm not lonely and although I likely wasted some time, I don't regret any of my life.
Beth
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I do have regrets, but I don?t hang on to them so unless we have been perfect in behaviour?
