Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

memories of your warm breath
tangled in my hair

love those lines! they create a very cool visual

great tanka!

thank you for sharing
shelley ð?¦?

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023

Thank you very much, Shelley, I appreciate your review and kind words.

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Comment from Nicki Nance

Excellent

Just yummy. This is written as the most unique and personal intimate moment, yet so many of us can resonate with it. You really capture the deeper level with a perfect graphic and your dramatic presentation.

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 Comment Written 03-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023

Thank you very much, Nicki, I appreciate your excellent review and kind words... specially.. yummy... lol

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Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

You have written a really sensual poem here with references to sensations and smells of breath and that the memories are "tantalizing" shows us how much the narrator loved being loved.

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 Comment Written 03-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023

Thank you very much, Big Sister, I appreciate your insightful review and kind words.

Love,

MariVal