Guided by Faith
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Comment from Pam (respa)
A good chapter, barbara, that shows good interaction among the characters. Various sub plots are developing that center around information Emma's father has and Emma's cabin having been disturbed by an unknown intruder.
There are also some lighter moments during dinner with discussion about adding the pastry they used to have at the bakery. It looks very good in the picture you used.
You did a good job with the basketball game between Seth and Keith. It allowed for continued discussion about Emma and situations involving her, as well as highlighting potential problems. A good concluding section, as well.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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A good chapter, barbara, that shows good interaction among the characters. Various sub plots are developing that center around information Emma's father has and Emma's cabin having been disturbed by an unknown intruder.
There are also some lighter moments during dinner with discussion about adding the pastry they used to have at the bakery. It looks very good in the picture you used.
You did a good job with the basketball game between Seth and Keith. It allowed for continued discussion about Emma and situations involving her, as well as highlighting potential problems. A good concluding section, as well.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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You are welcome.
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, the writing and editing are good. You introduced obstacles and issues to build drama. I'm sure your fan base will enjoy the mini- mystery and parental and secret stakes, as they will the step by step romance.
Good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Hmm, the writing and editing are good. You introduced obstacles and issues to build drama. I'm sure your fan base will enjoy the mini- mystery and parental and secret stakes, as they will the step by step romance.
Good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jay Squires
Yeah, I'm learning to like Seth's take-charge attitude. Everything ran smoothly for this chapter. I should add one thing: "He opened her door."[This confused me at first. I thought it was her house door. Nothing to change, I suppose, unless you wanted to add "car" before "door".]
Jay
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Yeah, I'm learning to like Seth's take-charge attitude. Everything ran smoothly for this chapter. I should add one thing: "He opened her door."[This confused me at first. I thought it was her house door. Nothing to change, I suppose, unless you wanted to add "car" before "door".]
Jay
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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I added car so there's no confusion. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from estory
Great realistic dialogue as always, nice and crisp, and I like that scene near the end when they get into Emma's house and feel like someone has gotten in. Nothing is disturbed, so that is creepy. you created some wonderful suspense there and left us with lots to think about as this mystery unfolds. The police cheif and Emma are also going to be sharing a house so the opportunity is there for the romance to bud...estory
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Great realistic dialogue as always, nice and crisp, and I like that scene near the end when they get into Emma's house and feel like someone has gotten in. Nothing is disturbed, so that is creepy. you created some wonderful suspense there and left us with lots to think about as this mystery unfolds. The police cheif and Emma are also going to be sharing a house so the opportunity is there for the romance to bud...estory
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Romance if budding. LOl Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
So you have introduced someone new into the equation. How long will it be before Seth and Emma figure out they are falling in love? You wrote another fine chapter, and I'm looking forward to the next one. Enjoy your afternoon. Shirley
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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So you have introduced someone new into the equation. How long will it be before Seth and Emma figure out they are falling in love? You wrote another fine chapter, and I'm looking forward to the next one. Enjoy your afternoon. Shirley
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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It will be a while before they admit they care for each other. I wonder who will figure it out first?
LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from w.j.debi
It is frightening to find someone has been in your house. It's probably wise for Emma to spend the night at Seth's. Could be fodder for gossip in a small town though it is innocent.
You are building the tension and the drama for this poor girl and those around her.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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It is frightening to find someone has been in your house. It's probably wise for Emma to spend the night at Seth's. Could be fodder for gossip in a small town though it is innocent.
You are building the tension and the drama for this poor girl and those around her.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Sanku
Oh things are hotting up .the stalker has somehow breached her privacy .Glad that Seth is a strong support .the story flows smoothly and there is clarity of ideas in your writing .I am waiting ...
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Oh things are hotting up .the stalker has somehow breached her privacy .Glad that Seth is a strong support .the story flows smoothly and there is clarity of ideas in your writing .I am waiting ...
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from damommy
I wish they'd find out who's stalking Emma. She doesn't seem to realize she is in danger, but Seth will see to it that's she safe. Maybe it's the biological mother's boyfriend, and they're trying to get some money out of her parents.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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I wish they'd find out who's stalking Emma. She doesn't seem to realize she is in danger, but Seth will see to it that's she safe. Maybe it's the biological mother's boyfriend, and they're trying to get some money out of her parents.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Emma only knows about the siphoning of gas. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mario PIERRE
I've read this chapter with much pleasure. There is a constant style throughout and, since I read a few prior chapters, I find the characters very well defined. The dialogue is good and the plot is evident as one reads.
I need a clarification for the lines where Emma says she feels someone's been in her cabin, and Seth replies that he "agrees"...
Thanks
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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I've read this chapter with much pleasure. There is a constant style throughout and, since I read a few prior chapters, I find the characters very well defined. The dialogue is good and the plot is evident as one reads.
I need a clarification for the lines where Emma says she feels someone's been in her cabin, and Seth replies that he "agrees"...
Thanks
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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It's just a gut feeling but both of them have the same feeling. Nothing definite. Thank you for the kind review.
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Oh. ok. Thanks for explaining. M
Comment from Paul McFarland
Nicely done, Barb. When Seth was first introduced as the police chief, I got the impression that he was an older man. You might want to go back and add something that would indicate his age.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Nicely done, Barb. When Seth was first introduced as the police chief, I got the impression that he was an older man. You might want to go back and add something that would indicate his age.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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In the previous post his was mentioned. He's 29. Thank you for the kind review.
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That shows you how good my memory is.
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Not a problem. That's the problem of posting only once a week. Where in reality the novel would be read all together.
