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Comment from CrystieCookie999
This poem has the tone of a prayer. It does a good job of incorporating an internal rhyme with 'cries' and 'dies.' There is also an end rhyme with 'must' and 'trust.' Well-done, and thanks for posting.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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This poem has the tone of a prayer. It does a good job of incorporating an internal rhyme with 'cries' and 'dies.' There is also an end rhyme with 'must' and 'trust.' Well-done, and thanks for posting.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Thanks so much!:)
Comment from Teri7
I really enjoyed reading your six star poem. You used great words that fit in this poem so well. I love the very last line the most. It is important for us to give God all our trust! Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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I really enjoyed reading your six star poem. You used great words that fit in this poem so well. I love the very last line the most. It is important for us to give God all our trust! Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Teri! Your awesome review and feedback are very much appreciated!
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry into the 1-1-2-12 Poetry contest. The text is a good size, but it could be one size larger with the swirly font. Your message is stated with clarity and is easily understood. Most writers will relate to the encouraging message you are presenting. The struggles are many and great for us at times. You use a lot of capital letters. I would begin the last line with a lowercase "l" because it completes the thought from the preceding line.
The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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This is a good entry into the 1-1-2-12 Poetry contest. The text is a good size, but it could be one size larger with the swirly font. Your message is stated with clarity and is easily understood. Most writers will relate to the encouraging message you are presenting. The struggles are many and great for us at times. You use a lot of capital letters. I would begin the last line with a lowercase "l" because it completes the thought from the preceding line.
The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Sandra!
Comment from harmony13
The author's words give great advice! I found these words to be engaging,
meaningful, descriptive and creative. I especially found the last line filled
with faith. Thank you for the author's notes - they speak volumes! The
artwork is awesome and compliments the words and theme of this poem.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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The author's words give great advice! I found these words to be engaging,
meaningful, descriptive and creative. I especially found the last line filled
with faith. Thank you for the author's notes - they speak volumes! The
artwork is awesome and compliments the words and theme of this poem.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much!! :)
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi,
This reminds us that faith can bring you through hard times. You need to understand this and try to give all your worries up to Him. Sometimes this is hard.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest
Joan
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Hi,
This reminds us that faith can bring you through hard times. You need to understand this and try to give all your worries up to Him. Sometimes this is hard.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest
Joan
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Joan!:)
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No problem.
Joan
Comment from Ulla
I liked, this 1-1-2-12 poem for the contest. Now, I'm not religious so I can't go into the faith thing, but if you work hard enough on fighting back your adversaries, you may stand a chance to win. Good luck Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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I liked, this 1-1-2-12 poem for the contest. Now, I'm not religious so I can't go into the faith thing, but if you work hard enough on fighting back your adversaries, you may stand a chance to win. Good luck Ulla:)))
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much, Ulla!
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Comment from godlucifer
in god we trust,in pain we die. pain and hardship is a tough task to follow. we must follow what is a reality which is god. your poem was a delightful read. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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in god we trust,in pain we die. pain and hardship is a tough task to follow. we must follow what is a reality which is god. your poem was a delightful read. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Comment from Raul1
We should all trust God for He helps us. It's beautifully written. It is interesting and impressive. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing! Good luck!
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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We should all trust God for He helps us. It's beautifully written. It is interesting and impressive. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing! Good luck!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Mary Vigasin
A powerful message for those who are in despair. In a moment of crisis,. While they may feel overwhelmed at the moment, time is needed to heal. They may not see the person they are hurting the most are those they leave behind.
Good luck on the contest
Mary
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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A powerful message for those who are in despair. In a moment of crisis,. While they may feel overwhelmed at the moment, time is needed to heal. They may not see the person they are hurting the most are those they leave behind.
Good luck on the contest
Mary
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Exactly. Thank you so much for your lovely review. <3
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
Wow, this is a beautiful piece of writing given the extraordinary limitations that a 1-1-2-12 imposes. It's difficult to illicit emotion with so few words. You, however, did.
-Chuck
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Wow, this is a beautiful piece of writing given the extraordinary limitations that a 1-1-2-12 imposes. It's difficult to illicit emotion with so few words. You, however, did.
-Chuck
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Chuck, thank you so much! Means a lot to me.