Comfort in the Darkness
rhyming poem21 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Debi.
-I can see why you won the contest.
-An excellent poem with effective imagery and rhyme.
-You paint a good word picture of what you like about the night.
-I like all of nature's sounds at night from the bullfrog to
the crickets strumming the beat.
-I like the calm feeling you describe in the closing verses.
-Well done and congratulations!!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
-Nice artwork and presentation, Debi.
-I can see why you won the contest.
-An excellent poem with effective imagery and rhyme.
-You paint a good word picture of what you like about the night.
-I like all of nature's sounds at night from the bullfrog to
the crickets strumming the beat.
-I like the calm feeling you describe in the closing verses.
-Well done and congratulations!!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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Hi Pam,
I am happy you enjoyed this poem and appreciate the kind comments about the picture it creates about the night and the calm feeling it makes. I love to take a walk after dark and hear and see all the things we don't see during the day.
Thank you for the congratulations.
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You are very welcome for the congratulations and review. Thanks for sharing in your reply.
Comment from Faith Williams
Such a lovely poem. I enjoyed your take on finding comfort in the dark as often it's about the fear of the dark. Certainly, by the end of reading your poem, one should feel that peace in the darkness. I especially enjoyed your third stanza, 'feel a cloak of twilight ease the burdens of the day.' Congratulations on your win!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
Such a lovely poem. I enjoyed your take on finding comfort in the dark as often it's about the fear of the dark. Certainly, by the end of reading your poem, one should feel that peace in the darkness. I especially enjoyed your third stanza, 'feel a cloak of twilight ease the burdens of the day.' Congratulations on your win!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Hi Fatih Williams,
Thank you for your analysis and the encouraging comments. I am happy you enjoyed a postive take on darkness, and I appreciate the congratulations as well.
Debi
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Congratulations on your win for this contest and you have a positive approach to darkness here and praise the skies above and the sounds outside, your poem is sweet and charming, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
Congratulations on your win for this contest and you have a positive approach to darkness here and praise the skies above and the sounds outside, your poem is sweet and charming, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Hi Dolly,
Thank you for the congratulations. I thought, darkness does not always have to be a bad thing, so I took a different approach. I'm pleased you enjoyed it.
Debi
Comment from LisaMay
I am pleased for you that your beautifully expressed poem won the contest. I connected with the ideas and imagery within it... the life within darkness, the swaying shadows and the easing of burdens are all things I too enjoy about darkness. Charmed, then dreaming.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
I am pleased for you that your beautifully expressed poem won the contest. I connected with the ideas and imagery within it... the life within darkness, the swaying shadows and the easing of burdens are all things I too enjoy about darkness. Charmed, then dreaming.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Hi LisaMay,
Thank you for the kind comments. I am pleased that you connected with this poem. I love the night and feel the darkness is a friendly thing.
Debi
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
The form and shape of the poem are expertly maintained. The qualities and mystery of darkness are celebrated which is contrary to what the reader expects are therefore twice as welcome!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
The form and shape of the poem are expertly maintained. The qualities and mystery of darkness are celebrated which is contrary to what the reader expects are therefore twice as welcome!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Hi Sarah Das Gupta,
Thank you for the kind comments about the writting and celebration of the darkness. I appreciate you stopping by to read and review.
Debi
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All best wishes!
Comment from Kit Minden
I find the darkness glorious
for stars only shine at night
Pure moonbeams bathe hopeful lovers
In their romantic light
ideas... cut more insignificant words to add stronger words
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
I find the darkness glorious
for stars only shine at night
Pure moonbeams bathe hopeful lovers
In their romantic light
ideas... cut more insignificant words to add stronger words
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Thank you for dropping by. I'll look at it. Your suggestion is appreciated. It does not fit the meter so I'll tinker with it.
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sorry hard to type today - MS - so did not get it best but just suggestions, ideas
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We are all here to learn. Thank you for stopping by. Maybe I should consider changing it. Romantic to me doesn't always mean lovers and isn't really what I was going for. Again. Thank you.
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a beautiful rhyming poem with good meter and lovely imagery. I like it a lot but the use of "I" in the first line of the second verse throws me off. Maybe "rejoice" to hear nocturnal sounds... Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
This is a beautiful rhyming poem with good meter and lovely imagery. I like it a lot but the use of "I" in the first line of the second verse throws me off. Maybe "rejoice" to hear nocturnal sounds... Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the kind comments and the suggestions for improvement. I took a look at the line in question. I wanted to keep it first person, but did make a change to remove the word "I" and I think it is better. I appreciate your help and the good luck wishes.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry into the Darkness Poetry contest. The text is a great size. The message is stated with clarity and is easily understood. Your rhyme scheme is done well. You made darkness a thing of beauty. That's a positive, uplifting slant that most did not do. Expand your poem box a bit. Drop the first line down a space and go the last word in your poem and hit enter once. This should open up your poem box. Great spacing adds to the presentation. The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
This is a good entry into the Darkness Poetry contest. The text is a great size. The message is stated with clarity and is easily understood. Your rhyme scheme is done well. You made darkness a thing of beauty. That's a positive, uplifting slant that most did not do. Expand your poem box a bit. Drop the first line down a space and go the last word in your poem and hit enter once. This should open up your poem box. Great spacing adds to the presentation. The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the kind comments about the writing and formatting. I changed the spacing as you suggested.
I appreciate you taking time to review and for the good luck wishes.
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You are most welcome. It now looks great!
Comment from Amanda Black
This is really great! I love the positivity of darkness as I feel the same way. I think the strongest part of the poem is in the last two stanzas. I felt the most emotion here. The line "I feel a cloak of twilight ease the burdens of the day" is my favorite of the whole poem. I have a love of twilight and find a peace there that is difficult to duplicate. This is truly where the soul goes to rest from the stresses of life.
I also really love the last stanza. Likening the darkness to a person that wraps you up in it's arms where you are safe to sleep and dream is beautiful. Thank you for your work.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
This is really great! I love the positivity of darkness as I feel the same way. I think the strongest part of the poem is in the last two stanzas. I felt the most emotion here. The line "I feel a cloak of twilight ease the burdens of the day" is my favorite of the whole poem. I have a love of twilight and find a peace there that is difficult to duplicate. This is truly where the soul goes to rest from the stresses of life.
I also really love the last stanza. Likening the darkness to a person that wraps you up in it's arms where you are safe to sleep and dream is beautiful. Thank you for your work.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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I appreciate you taking the time to do a detailed analysis, pointing out which lines you liked, and how you related to it. It is helpful and most appreciated.
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Very happy to help!
Comment from JT traveller
I really enjoyed the fact that you made light of the darkness, (pardon the pun). There is enough sadness in the world. Your poem made me think of fireflies that light up the darkness. Best of luck. A well composed, upbeat poem.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
I really enjoyed the fact that you made light of the darkness, (pardon the pun). There is enough sadness in the world. Your poem made me think of fireflies that light up the darkness. Best of luck. A well composed, upbeat poem.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the encouraging review about the writing and the pun. I like the darkness and it seemed like a different take for the contest. I like the thought regarding the fireflies.