Comment from Heather Knight

Excellent

This is beautifully written and presented like all your poems. I agree with what you say about the calming effect of the sea. I'm going to the beach tomorrow for four days and I'm really looking forward to it.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023

Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I like the idea of the waning sun having loud thoughts having them quelled by those pounding waves distracting enough to drown out those thoughts, some wonderful poetic language, well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023

I meant the observer (a person) feels calm listening to the waves sound.)

Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

Gypsy hugs

reply by royowen on 16-Mar-2023

Of course that?s your meaning, not mine.

Comment from Jasmine Girl

Excellent

What a beautiful poem about the roaring ocean. But I'm a little confused. In the second line, you said, "calm ocean" but in the third line it became, "loud". I know tide causes the waves in the ocean.

Well done.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023

I added a note in my author notes. I was thinking of cars, people, animals making noise. Or if you are in bed and can't go to sleep ocean sounds is very soothing. I'll check it out.

Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

Gypsy

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Loved the assonance of the three words in the final line: drowns loud sounds. There is something really calming about the ocean waves on the sand and twilight brings a quieter time of the day. Enjoyed this haiku!

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023

Oh good, you get it. A couple of people were confused eventhough I added an explanation to my author notes. (*/*)

Thank you very much, big sister. I appreciate your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

Love,

Marival ❤️

Comment from Caitriona

Excellent

Again, a short poem packed with a lot of emotion. The terms pours is emotional and develops the entire poem. The corresponding "drowns" term protects the poem. Very interesting! Good luck!

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023

Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

Gypsy

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

The satori in this one has definitely got me pondering, as "calm ocean" I am pondering what noise might be drowned out, that is the beauty of haiku, beautifully written and presented****kahpot

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 Comment Written 15-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2023

The loud sounds could be other people or cars, etc... Also if you are in bed listening to ocean sounds on your cellphone. Thank you, Jacqueline. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Great feedback. Have a wonderful night (or day).

Gypsy hugs

Comment from JT traveller

Excellent

Yes. I love this. "A moment in nature" is conveyed so beautifully. The ocean's calming force drowning out all noise, both physical and mental. Perfect. Great colour scheme and illustrations that seem to perfectly interact with each other. Jacqueline

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 Comment Written 15-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2023

Thank you, Jacqueline. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Great feedback. Have a wonderful night (or day).

Gypsy hugs

reply by JT traveller on 16-Mar-2023

Noon here. Have a great night Gypsy. Jacqueline 😊