A Cost
If we don't use it, will we lose it?27 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This two-line poem, A Cost, has the proper formatting and projects the fear that humans will lose value in community and each other as we move further into a cyber world.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2023
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This two-line poem, A Cost, has the proper formatting and projects the fear that humans will lose value in community and each other as we move further into a cyber world.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2023
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Thank you! appreciate the feedback
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a good entry for the two line poem contest. A rhymed couplet that carries a profound yet valid statement. The author notes is much appreciated and interesting. I agree. Best of luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2023
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This is a good entry for the two line poem contest. A rhymed couplet that carries a profound yet valid statement. The author notes is much appreciated and interesting. I agree. Best of luck in the competition.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2023
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Thank you! I appreciate your feedback
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry into the two-lined poem contest. The text is a great size. I like the text centered. Your balance of the text in the poem box could be better. Drop down the first line one space. Your message is stated with clarity. You have expressed a valid concern for mankind. You even made it rhyme. The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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This is a good entry into the two-lined poem contest. The text is a great size. I like the text centered. Your balance of the text in the poem box could be better. Drop down the first line one space. Your message is stated with clarity. You have expressed a valid concern for mankind. You even made it rhyme. The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Excellent suggestion, Sandra! I'm much happier with that. Your review and suggestions are, as always, much appreciated.:)
Comment from GWHARGIS
It might dull in some people but humans crave human connection. I see those who are being absorbed in the tech world fading out. Not the technology but those who rely on it solely. This was a very thought provoking post. Thank you for posting it. Gretchen
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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It might dull in some people but humans crave human connection. I see those who are being absorbed in the tech world fading out. Not the technology but those who rely on it solely. This was a very thought provoking post. Thank you for posting it. Gretchen
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Excellent point. Thanks so much for your review and comments!
Comment from Mintybee
This reads almost like a sci-fi writing prompt. It is an interesting idea. The rhyming couplet style works effectively for a two line poem. The picture works, as it shows a person alone, with a questionable road ahead.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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This reads almost like a sci-fi writing prompt. It is an interesting idea. The rhyming couplet style works effectively for a two line poem. The picture works, as it shows a person alone, with a questionable road ahead.
Mintybee
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for your review and feedback!
Comment from L. Kalere
You said so much in your two lines...quite profound. I, too, have these thoughts, but I'm much more cynical; I think it's the human species that will become extinct. Thanks for addressing a tough issue. Very well done. Linda
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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You said so much in your two lines...quite profound. I, too, have these thoughts, but I'm much more cynical; I think it's the human species that will become extinct. Thanks for addressing a tough issue. Very well done. Linda
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thanks so much for your review, Linda. And your thoughts on the subject are very much appreciated...
I honestly can't say that I disagree! We're hardly "necessary" in certain situations these days....
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello, Mystery Writer!
Profound and timely.
A well-crafted two line poem that resonates deeply with me.
And who is to blame for the disconnections?
In a sense, we all are... and that is a pity...
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Hello, Mystery Writer!
Profound and timely.
A well-crafted two line poem that resonates deeply with me.
And who is to blame for the disconnections?
In a sense, we all are... and that is a pity...
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Couldn't agree more.. we are paving the way! It saddens me to think that people of the (not so distant) future are helplessly doomed to feel... well, very little. Thank you for your lovely review, as always :)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It is a very worrying trend, I have to agree with you. You've done very well with these two lines, they are perfect for the contest. And the picture you chose to illustrate you poem works fabulously! Well done and good luck! :)) Sandra
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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It is a very worrying trend, I have to agree with you. You've done very well with these two lines, they are perfect for the contest. And the picture you chose to illustrate you poem works fabulously! Well done and good luck! :)) Sandra
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much Sandra !
Comment from mermaids
"All empathy will be lost" is a powerful and true to life line. Your words have meaning and speak volumes. The lost of connection in our technological world is something to think about. Excellent theme for a poem.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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"All empathy will be lost" is a powerful and true to life line. Your words have meaning and speak volumes. The lost of connection in our technological world is something to think about. Excellent theme for a poem.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you! I really appreciate your feedback and comments.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Two Line Poetry Contest. You are right, we better make some changes soon.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good connection between lines.
Goodluck
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Excellent entry for the Two Line Poetry Contest. You are right, we better make some changes soon.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good connection between lines.
Goodluck
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much, Gypsy! I appreciate your feedback
