A Poetic Pause
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Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry into the 12-word contest. The text is a great size. The message is written clearly stated, but the reader is left unsure who you are addressing. Who are the folks creating outrage and planned torture? The visual appears joyful so it doesn't help with the descriptions in the poem. . Good luck in the contest.
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This is a good entry into the 12-word contest. The text is a great size. The message is written clearly stated, but the reader is left unsure who you are addressing. Who are the folks creating outrage and planned torture? The visual appears joyful so it doesn't help with the descriptions in the poem. . Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 11-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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My Sandra thank you so much for your review and for your comments. I very much appreciate it it's always and you're pointing out that different things is also very helpful when I wrote this poem. I was speaking in general as man. We have enslaved our own people and others along the way. I wanted to talk about that so there's only so many words you can put. In a 12 word contest however the picture I feel is more like a woman breaking out of the black white. Hum drama slavery and back into the light. That's why she's color and everything else is black-and-white hopefully that makes some sense for you again. I thank you very much for your comment and I hope you're having a great day. Thank you for taking the time to do so.
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You are welcome. Thanks for the explanation.
Comment from jmdg1954
Well conceived thought process conveyed in a mere twelve words. Each line of three words can stand alone for the reader to ponder.
Good contest entry. Best of luck.
John
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Well conceived thought process conveyed in a mere twelve words. Each line of three words can stand alone for the reader to ponder.
Good contest entry. Best of luck.
John
Comment Written 11-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Thank you John for your time and for going through my. I pull them off in your thoughts and your review. I very much appreciated I need all comments and suggestions are welcome as well. Thank you so much again have a great night!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Some powerful statements here from both sides of the argument and it is never right to enslave anyone and it still exists in today's society in certain places in the world, mainly levied against women, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Some powerful statements here from both sides of the argument and it is never right to enslave anyone and it still exists in today's society in certain places in the world, mainly levied against women, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 11-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Thank you Dolly well I'd like it. It can be interesting to turn. Write something powerful and yet poetic with 12 words. But I like those kinds of challenges and I thank you again as always for taking the time to read them. I don't know what she is the best and a good evening too
Comment from Wendy G
A thoughtful social comment. Some of the lines seem to refer to the perpetrators, others to the victims. Hence the reader must pose the questions and find the answers. Well done. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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A thoughtful social comment. Some of the lines seem to refer to the perpetrators, others to the victims. Hence the reader must pose the questions and find the answers. Well done. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 11-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Thank you Wendy I'm so glad you liked it. It's can be difficult to be impactful and poetic. It's a few words and I'm so very new to this site. So you're review and your comments and kind words are especially welcome with me. Thanks again and have a great night!
Comment from JT traveller
This is great. Everything from the chosen image, to the font size and selection to the spacing, giving the reader pause between each line. There are so many twelve word poems in the competition but this is a top contender for sure. Well done.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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This is great. Everything from the chosen image, to the font size and selection to the spacing, giving the reader pause between each line. There are so many twelve word poems in the competition but this is a top contender for sure. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Wow that is high praise I'm so glad you like it. What can I say? I appreciate your time and your comments and Iooking through my poem to provide a review. I am privileged and happy you like it so well hope you have a great night!!
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Praise where praise is due. Have a great evening. Jacqueline
Comment from royowen
I think you've written a good poem in few words, it's difficult to sink a lot of meaning into a work with such a short narrative, but I think you've done very well indeed, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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I think you've written a good poem in few words, it's difficult to sink a lot of meaning into a work with such a short narrative, but I think you've done very well indeed, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Thank you Roy I'm so glad you like it and thank you for stopping to read it And give your evaluation and your comments. It's always appreciated hope you have a great night!
Comment from Pantygynt
Short pieces such as this are a lot harder to write than it might st first sight seem. They need to say something significant as this one does at the same time as employing poetic devices, in this case repetition, to ensure the end result is poetic as this one is.
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Short pieces such as this are a lot harder to write than it might st first sight seem. They need to say something significant as this one does at the same time as employing poetic devices, in this case repetition, to ensure the end result is poetic as this one is.
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Comment Written 11-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much I'm so glad you like it. It is so interesting trying to get some good words and shows smallest space and I. Thank you for noticing that and for your time and for your comments always welcome. I hope you have a great night thank you again!