Haiku (freeze captures life)
Haiku .. 5-7-520 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
This is an excellent haiku for the contest. Great two first lines which are grammatically interconnected. The satori line is the aha moment. Great imagery throughout the poem. Good luck. All best, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2023
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This is an excellent haiku for the contest. Great two first lines which are grammatically interconnected. The satori line is the aha moment. Great imagery throughout the poem. Good luck. All best, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 04-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2023
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Thank you, Ulla. I appreciate your supportive review on my haiku. Have a great Sunday:-) ~DD
Comment from Pantygynt
This traditional style haiku exploits the haiku's features well and the daffodils burst upon us unexpectedly in the satori line just as they should so.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2023
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This traditional style haiku exploits the haiku's features well and the daffodils burst upon us unexpectedly in the satori line just as they should so.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2023
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Thank you, Jim. Your reviews are always appreciated. ~DD
Comment from jenintorre
I am not the best person to review this as I don't really understand Haiku but I really like this and adore the picture of the smiling daffodils. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2023
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I am not the best person to review this as I don't really understand Haiku but I really like this and adore the picture of the smiling daffodils. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2023
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Jen, thank you for your thoughtful review on my haiku :-) as well as wishing contest luck. Have a great Sunday. ~D🌸
Comment from lyenochka
This is so fun as you play with lots of visual terms like "freeze" which is a camera term as in freeze frame and also the painting term "still life" is reversed in your first line. "Snaps a pose" takes us back to the camera where the daffodils are smiling for their picture! I think this will do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2023
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This is so fun as you play with lots of visual terms like "freeze" which is a camera term as in freeze frame and also the painting term "still life" is reversed in your first line. "Snaps a pose" takes us back to the camera where the daffodils are smiling for their picture! I think this will do well in the contest!
Comment Written 04-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2023
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Ah, finally? someone who gets my play on words in this haiku and understands what I am saying between lines. Thank you, Helen and thank you for the shining stars. I appreciate you ~D💛
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💖 Cleverly worded!
Comment from Janel Mock
This poem was written beautifully. I love nature and lovely words that go along with it. Thank you for sharing this piece and good luck in the contest! I look forward to reading more! ~Janel
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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This poem was written beautifully. I love nature and lovely words that go along with it. Thank you for sharing this piece and good luck in the contest! I look forward to reading more! ~Janel
Comment Written 03-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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Janel ~ thank you. I appreciate your review on my haiku. ~DD
Comment from Mark D. R.
DD,
Of course, you have penned in my favorite poem genre with your overall presentation!
Your Haiku freezes that still life of the daffodils in bloom during our Spring - a welcome sight for sure.
Best wishes in the contest voting.
Mark
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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DD,
Of course, you have penned in my favorite poem genre with your overall presentation!
Your Haiku freezes that still life of the daffodils in bloom during our Spring - a welcome sight for sure.
Best wishes in the contest voting.
Mark
Comment Written 03-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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Thank you, Mark. It is always a pleasure to read your reviews :-) ~DDxo
Ps - Happy belated/early birthday 🥳
Comment from rspoet
Hello DD,
This is an excellent 5-7-5 haiku for the contest
with wonderful imagery and connection in the first two lines.
The satori line is very good and matches the theme,
though some might not like the personification in "smiling."
Perfect picture choice.
Best wishes and good luck in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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Hello DD,
This is an excellent 5-7-5 haiku for the contest
with wonderful imagery and connection in the first two lines.
The satori line is very good and matches the theme,
though some might not like the personification in "smiling."
Perfect picture choice.
Best wishes and good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 03-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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Thank you, Robert. I appreciate your thoughtful comments on my haiku. I love the blooms of flowers. It is their way of smiling upon us - fresh faced and colourful :-) Of course, this is my opinion alone. ~DDx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good image and presentation, DD.
-You have written a good haiku with a good topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery.
-Good contrast between lines one and two.
-A good satori line.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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-Good image and presentation, DD.
-You have written a good haiku with a good topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery.
-Good contrast between lines one and two.
-A good satori line.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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Thank you, Pam. I appreciate your thoughtful review. ~DDx
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You are welcome, DD.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very lovely and well written haiku poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and lovely imagery of the beautiful daffodils. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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This is a very lovely and well written haiku poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and lovely imagery of the beautiful daffodils. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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Comment Written 03-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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Thank you, Teri. Your review on my haiku is much appreciated. ~DDx
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Daffs are always pleasing and I enjoyed your few words to champion their smiles in spring. You captures a sunny day here with these beauties, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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Daffs are always pleasing and I enjoyed your few words to champion their smiles in spring. You captures a sunny day here with these beauties, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 03-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023
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Your review on my haiku is much appreciated, Dolly :-) ~DDxo