Comment from AP Apgar

Excellent

I like your Haiku poem - excellent picture presentation - good word count and connection between lines. Poem presents and interesting concept of the ocean giving its 'perpetual gift' - 5 syllables? - Notes: The ebb and flow of life with its ups and downs - in sync with the rising and falling of the breath - expanding the depth of the poem..good job and good luck in the contest. AP

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023

Thank you AP, your comments and review are so helpful and encouraging, as always very much appreciated****kahpot

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I adore the sea and the ebb and flow as the gentle movement is soothing and I enjoyed your inventive words in your Haiku, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x

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 Comment Written 05-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023

Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I think you must have changed the first line as now the title does not match "upon bestowed gift". I think I liked the "upon water's edge" better because it fits the more physical meaning of the second line. Then the final line has a strong satori feeling. Best wishes in the contest!

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 Comment Written 05-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023

Thank you I have changed back, (did I mention that I get confused sometimes) Ha! Ha!, as always very much appreciated****kahpot