Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Excellent

Beautifully written again. Love poetry brings out the soft touch when condensing. This is exactly what you have done in this poem. What are the syllables with this type of poem being you have more than a 5,7,5 syllables and verses?

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 Comment Written 25-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023

The syllable count is 5/7/5/7/7 OR LESS for each poem. There are two poems, one from one lover and the second a response from the second lover. So it's 5/7/5/7/7 and 5/7/5/7/7 OR LESS syllables. This rule is because English syllables are longer than Japanese syllables. For example.....
HAIKU IN JAPANESE
Furu ike ya
kawazu tobikomu
mizu no too
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Fu/ru i/ke ya=5
ka/wa/zu to/bi/ko/mu= 7
mi/zu no o/to= 5
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SAME HAIKU TRANSLATED TO ENGLISH
Old pond = 2
frogs jumped in ? =3
sound of water= 4

thank you, Rosemary, I appreciate your lovely review.

gypsy

reply by Rosemary Everson1 on 26-Feb-2023

thank you for explaining.

reply by Rosemary Everson1 on 26-Feb-2023

thank you for explaining.