A Poetic Pause
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Comment from JT traveller
And so we meet again...
I can totally relate to your words and the feeling of betrayal so clearly expressed in your poem.
Intriguing, descriptive, emotive. Your words make me want to rage and weep simultaneously.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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And so we meet again...
I can totally relate to your words and the feeling of betrayal so clearly expressed in your poem.
Intriguing, descriptive, emotive. Your words make me want to rage and weep simultaneously.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Thank you for your insight believe me I've been there many times and I still am so I choose to keep writing poetry, keep painting, keep making jewelry keep doing my readings and give myself the gift of being happy every day. Thank you for your generous words and your review as always I am privileged in order to have it.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry to the 3-line poem contest. Your message is strong, well-stated with a great flow. However, your small text is dwarfed under the large visual with lettering. The text small is not prominent. I would enlarge the text by severe sizes and prepares make some or all of the words bold. You have a strong message. You could present unexpected font with this poem. Your thoughts are fresh! It was a good read and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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This is a good entry to the 3-line poem contest. Your message is strong, well-stated with a great flow. However, your small text is dwarfed under the large visual with lettering. The text small is not prominent. I would enlarge the text by severe sizes and prepares make some or all of the words bold. You have a strong message. You could present unexpected font with this poem. Your thoughts are fresh! It was a good read and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much Sandra for your really great review I will definitely look it into that thank you for the tip I appreciate it very very much I hope you have a great evening!
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You are most welcome. It is powerful!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Black, deep is the hole 5
In/nu/en/do they cast me7
**(In a false mold of lies) 6
Nice entry for the 3 Line Poetry Contest.
The syllables count is wrong. By the contest rules, it's supposed to be 5/7/5 syllables.
Good presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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Black, deep is the hole 5
In/nu/en/do they cast me7
**(In a false mold of lies) 6
Nice entry for the 3 Line Poetry Contest.
The syllables count is wrong. By the contest rules, it's supposed to be 5/7/5 syllables.
Good presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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Oh thank you so much for telling me and for the love review I really appreciate it I'll took it out right here and now thank you!!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I can't read the poem because the letters are too small and too similar in tone to the color behind them. It is a nice picture. I hope you have time to make corrections if you have entered a contest. This is now a good poem that I can read, and I understand it as I've been in a similar position. Ignore the bad-mouthers and be friendly to them. Really confuses them.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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I can't read the poem because the letters are too small and too similar in tone to the color behind them. It is a nice picture. I hope you have time to make corrections if you have entered a contest. This is now a good poem that I can read, and I understand it as I've been in a similar position. Ignore the bad-mouthers and be friendly to them. Really confuses them.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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OKI want to head my light and you don't quite a bit it should be OK to read now if you'd like to try thank you for letting me know slide you like the picture!!
Comment from Tommy Francesco
This is a powerful and moving piece that captures the feeling of being falsely accused or misunderstood. The use of vivid imagery and language creates a sense of oppression and isolation, making it a relatable and impactful piece for many readers.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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This is a powerful and moving piece that captures the feeling of being falsely accused or misunderstood. The use of vivid imagery and language creates a sense of oppression and isolation, making it a relatable and impactful piece for many readers.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much Tommy I'm glad you found it so interesting and thank you for your comments and taking the time to read it I much appreciate it I hope you have a wonderful evening thanks again!
Comment from Mintybee
This poem is very emotional. Your words are very strong. "They cast me in a false mold of lies," wow. It is so easy for people to make assumptions and decide a person's character incorrectly. It's hard to change a mind once that happens. Your poem hits on human nature, and the struggle to clear a name unfairly sullied. Well done.
Mintybee
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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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This poem is very emotional. Your words are very strong. "They cast me in a false mold of lies," wow. It is so easy for people to make assumptions and decide a person's character incorrectly. It's hard to change a mind once that happens. Your poem hits on human nature, and the struggle to clear a name unfairly sullied. Well done.
Mintybee
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Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Oh wow thank you so much for that awesome review I really appreciate it! Your comments are both insightful and encouraging to write more. And you are absolutely right I am fortunately have become the victim of that by my own family. I am now alone but much more peaceful. So thank you so much for your very great review and taking the time to look at it I hope you have a great day!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Innuendo can be just as damaging as plain harsh words as when we are suspected of wrong doing when we are innocent we do feel betrayed by lies and of course you said all this with so few words here Lea, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Innuendo can be just as damaging as plain harsh words as when we are suspected of wrong doing when we are innocent we do feel betrayed by lies and of course you said all this with so few words here Lea, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Thank you Dolly very kind of you! I'm very much appreciative! As always you are insightful and hit the nail on the head!
Thank you again and have a great day!
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You are most welcome Lea x x