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Comment from royowen
I love the skilful way you deal with your pronouns and articles, people leave out articles, in sacrifice for meter, you are a master at language, and the economy of the same,, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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I love the skilful way you deal with your pronouns and articles, people leave out articles, in sacrifice for meter, you are a master at language, and the economy of the same,, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Thank you Ray, after years of writing Japanese poetry, I learned to write succinctly. I'm glad you notice. I only add articles when it's absolutely necessary.
Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
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Yes, I tell them off, it?s all part of being a writer. Word economy,
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A passionate and sensual write about that feeling we all crave. There is a great intensity in these words, a lust that cannot be satisfied without those lips touching, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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A passionate and sensual write about that feeling we all crave. There is a great intensity in these words, a lust that cannot be satisfied without those lips touching, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Ricky1024
"I Crave Your Lips"makes me thirsty for life.
Well written rich in Theme and Imagery it also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and have a great day.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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"I Crave Your Lips"makes me thirsty for life.
Well written rich in Theme and Imagery it also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and have a great day.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from poetwatch
A poet's pen is a brush on canvas, Gypsy. :) I don't know if anyone has said that, but I just did. You inspired me. Your 4/6/3/8/6 -- 5/6/3/8/6 Tanka Suite Is very loving, yet lonely. I have not written much about Tanka poetry so I hope you don't mind if I drop in once in a while. Most all I write comes to me, and I write my heart. In other words, I don't write that much. :) Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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A poet's pen is a brush on canvas, Gypsy. :) I don't know if anyone has said that, but I just did. You inspired me. Your 4/6/3/8/6 -- 5/6/3/8/6 Tanka Suite Is very loving, yet lonely. I have not written much about Tanka poetry so I hope you don't mind if I drop in once in a while. Most all I write comes to me, and I write my heart. In other words, I don't write that much. :) Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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I don't mind, I encourage to write tanka when the mood guides you. Tanka is the language of love.
Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
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It is art on canvas. I loved it.
Comment from lyenochka
That's quite the sultry poem. It shows that there is a lot of passion that still remains even if the narrator isn't with her beloved. I like the food references to fit the "craving."
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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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That's quite the sultry poem. It shows that there is a lot of passion that still remains even if the narrator isn't with her beloved. I like the food references to fit the "craving."
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Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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Big Sister, thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Love and hugs,
Marival ❤️
Comment from Rickie1
Gypsy
Wow! You're knocking me over. There is so much: emotion, passion and erraticism. Freaky, quirky, weird. I like that all packed together with a few words and images. Nice job.
Rickie
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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Gypsy
Wow! You're knocking me over. There is so much: emotion, passion and erraticism. Freaky, quirky, weird. I like that all packed together with a few words and images. Nice job.
Rickie
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
Comment from JT traveller
Lusty, erotic, full of vivid imagery.
My favourite line,
"it's easy to get lost in you
drunk with fierce lustful love."
I don't wish to repeat myself but yet another fabulous creation. Thank you Gypsy.
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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Lusty, erotic, full of vivid imagery.
My favourite line,
"it's easy to get lost in you
drunk with fierce lustful love."
I don't wish to repeat myself but yet another fabulous creation. Thank you Gypsy.
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Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs