One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Sugarray77
Oh, Gypsy, this is very moving. You have done a clever job with this form... it reads as if its a short story in a tiny poem. Very tender and emotional... I enjoyed it and its perfect for this prompt.
Melissa
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Oh, Gypsy, this is very moving. You have done a clever job with this form... it reads as if its a short story in a tiny poem. Very tender and emotional... I enjoyed it and its perfect for this prompt.
Melissa
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much, Melissa! You are very kind.
Gypsy
Comment from aryr
What a wonderful naani poem, Gypsy. The poem itself displayed the anger and the hurt it caused the child. The window pain it caused. She was hurt and was justified. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed be n hugs!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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What a wonderful naani poem, Gypsy. The poem itself displayed the anger and the hurt it caused the child. The window pain it caused. She was hurt and was justified. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed be n hugs!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much! I appreciate your thoughtful review and kind words. Have a wonderful day. Blessed be.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is heavy and poignant as you purposely use window pain to address the sadness of all the foster children who watch as another child goes away with new parents. This is a sad situation for so many children who are foster children for the rest of their lives. My lover was a foster child and I heard all about her suffering and pain as she wistfully wished she would be what she called a 'real child.'
Thanks for addressing this sad tale of woeful neglect.
Jesse
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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This is heavy and poignant as you purposely use window pain to address the sadness of all the foster children who watch as another child goes away with new parents. This is a sad situation for so many children who are foster children for the rest of their lives. My lover was a foster child and I heard all about her suffering and pain as she wistfully wished she would be what she called a 'real child.'
Thanks for addressing this sad tale of woeful neglect.
Jesse
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much! I appreciate your thoughtful review and kind words. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
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You are welcome, Gypsy.
Thanks for the hugs.
Jesse
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A new life for someone in need here and your few words bring a tear to my eye as abandoned children need a home where they can be nurtured and cared for, a warm and delightful write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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A new life for someone in need here and your few words bring a tear to my eye as abandoned children need a home where they can be nurtured and cared for, a warm and delightful write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much! I appreciate your thoughtful review and kind words. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your naani poem- good supporting picture presentation- rain on window- dreary day - story perhaps of an orphan not being selected that day- can only imagine the pain and hopelessness from the child perspective- rain drops like tears- good use of notes to explain- good job AP
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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I like your naani poem- good supporting picture presentation- rain on window- dreary day - story perhaps of an orphan not being selected that day- can only imagine the pain and hopelessness from the child perspective- rain drops like tears- good use of notes to explain- good job AP
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much! I appreciate your thoughtful review and kind words. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a moving NAANI about orphanage where a kid was jealous of another child was adopted. I like the metaphor of "Raindrops on the window pain" to express his/her feelings.
I have leant something from this poem.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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What a moving NAANI about orphanage where a kid was jealous of another child was adopted. I like the metaphor of "Raindrops on the window pain" to express his/her feelings.
I have leant something from this poem.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much! I appreciate your thoughtful review and kind words. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from kahpot
Waiting for adoption must really be confusing for a young child,
"Why am I here- why not me?" I can understand the pain as they watch their friends walk away through the window, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Waiting for adoption must really be confusing for a young child,
"Why am I here- why not me?" I can understand the pain as they watch their friends walk away through the window, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much! I appreciate your thoughtful review and kind words. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy
Comment from jacquelyn popp
I enjoyed reading your poem even though it was a little sad with the idea of her as an orphan. Well done. It's good that you told a story of a child dressed, so she would have a chance to get new parents by using only those few lines. Nice job with that. All of your lines worked well together. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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I enjoyed reading your poem even though it was a little sad with the idea of her as an orphan. Well done. It's good that you told a story of a child dressed, so she would have a chance to get new parents by using only those few lines. Nice job with that. All of your lines worked well together. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much! I appreciate your thoughtful review and kind words. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
The adoption / fostering element comes out in your poem clearly even without your note, along with the pain of those children left behind time after time. I hope you will organize a contest when November comes around. kay
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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The adoption / fostering element comes out in your poem clearly even without your note, along with the pain of those children left behind time after time. I hope you will organize a contest when November comes around. kay
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much! I appreciate your thoughtful review and kind words. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
That's so sad. I can't imagine the pain of orphans. My grandparents ran started an orphanage. The orphans liked me because my parents were in the US so they felt like I was one of them.
I liked how you used the few lines to tell a whole story of a child dressed to attract would-be parents but to experience rejection.
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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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That's so sad. I can't imagine the pain of orphans. My grandparents ran started an orphanage. The orphans liked me because my parents were in the US so they felt like I was one of them.
I liked how you used the few lines to tell a whole story of a child dressed to attract would-be parents but to experience rejection.
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Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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I'm sorry... it must have been hard to live away from your parents at such early age, but maybe not.
Thank you, big sister. You are the best.
Love
Marival