The Divine Nonsense of Jim Wile
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "The Ballad of Ole Blue"A collection of 13 humorous poems
23 total reviews
Comment from Richard Montfort Cary
Jim,
You really are gift to these "pages" here at FanStory. Remarkable ease in rhyme and sense, no forcing the issue in order to fit a format. Worthy of multiple accolades!
Richard
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2023
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Jim,
You really are gift to these "pages" here at FanStory. Remarkable ease in rhyme and sense, no forcing the issue in order to fit a format. Worthy of multiple accolades!
Richard
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2023
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Thank you very much, Richard. You're very kind. Thanks for the stars too.
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:>)
Comment from Sarah Tummey
I enjoyed reading this, and learnt a new word in the process - caboose. I like that!
I gave it the 4 stars because I'm not sure I would have understood some of the phrases if I was a child, E.G. way beyond his prime, out to pasture. It might have been better categorised as Humour.
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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2023
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I enjoyed reading this, and learnt a new word in the process - caboose. I like that!
I gave it the 4 stars because I'm not sure I would have understood some of the phrases if I was a child, E.G. way beyond his prime, out to pasture. It might have been better categorised as Humour.
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Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2023
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Thank you for reading the poem, Sarah. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Jim, I loved this and how you personified the train. It did meet with an awful ending, but it was a joy to read, all the same. No wonder you kept the poems for your grandchildren. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2023
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Hi Jim, I loved this and how you personified the train. It did meet with an awful ending, but it was a joy to read, all the same. No wonder you kept the poems for your grandchildren. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2023
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Yeah, I'm hoping it isn't too gruesome and sad for a children's poem, but I guess they should learn that not everything has a happy ending.
Thanks for the great review.
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I totally agree.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
My pops was a railroader. My best memory was riding the line to P-town on the Delaware in the caboose, another piece of history gone to the grave in modern days. Small wood burning stove within kept me warm and the loft was a place where you could grow to love the countryside more than down below.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2023
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My pops was a railroader. My best memory was riding the line to P-town on the Delaware in the caboose, another piece of history gone to the grave in modern days. Small wood burning stove within kept me warm and the loft was a place where you could grow to love the countryside more than down below.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2023
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That's a cool memory!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine tribute to this special steam train and all her hard work Jim. Perfect metre and rhymes here and I loved this story penned by a skilful and talented pen, love Dolly x
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A fine tribute to this special steam train and all her hard work Jim. Perfect metre and rhymes here and I loved this story penned by a skilful and talented pen, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much, Dolly, for the great review and the 6 stars. It means a lot to me coming from you because I admire your work so much.
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Well deserved Jim, this is as magical write, and thank you for your kind compliment x x x
Comment from lyenochka
I'm glad your kids and grandkids are continuing the tradition of reading and enjoying poetry, too. Your poem reads well in mostly iambic heptameter. But the story is a bit sad for kids especially as you have personified the train so well. Best wishes in the contest!
Congrats on the 100th post!
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2023
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I'm glad your kids and grandkids are continuing the tradition of reading and enjoying poetry, too. Your poem reads well in mostly iambic heptameter. But the story is a bit sad for kids especially as you have personified the train so well. Best wishes in the contest!
Congrats on the 100th post!
Comment Written 29-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2023
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Thank you! It's hard to believe it's been 100 posts already.
You're right about the sad ending. It might frighten smaller kids.
Comment from royowen
It's my preferred style, I like writing in heptameter, which is a form of ballad style in which amazing grace is written in. 8686, abcb in the Heptameter style it's 14 syllables and aabb rhyming, yours has variable meter, and wanders a little from 86 a little, but great job, Jim blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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It's my preferred style, I like writing in heptameter, which is a form of ballad style in which amazing grace is written in. 8686, abcb in the Heptameter style it's 14 syllables and aabb rhyming, yours has variable meter, and wanders a little from 86 a little, but great job, Jim blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Roy.
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Welcome
Comment from jacquelyn popp
Great poem. Well done with the rhyming and the way your words flowed together. Your poem was nicely done and quite an enjoyable read. Too bad he was smashed to smithereens. Thank you for sharing your poem.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Great poem. Well done with the rhyming and the way your words flowed together. Your poem was nicely done and quite an enjoyable read. Too bad he was smashed to smithereens. Thank you for sharing your poem.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Thank you very much, Jacquelyn.
Comment from Karyn2
First of all, I feel I have won the lottery by landing on your 100th Post!! Congratulations and what a reward I get! This is such a gem of a poem. Poor Old Blue! That last stanza is hysterical! Your rhythm was faultless all the way through and chugged so nicely it really felt like the train in motion! Such a fun read.
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First of all, I feel I have won the lottery by landing on your 100th Post!! Congratulations and what a reward I get! This is such a gem of a poem. Poor Old Blue! That last stanza is hysterical! Your rhythm was faultless all the way through and chugged so nicely it really felt like the train in motion! Such a fun read.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much, Karyn. You write the nicest reviews! It surprised me to learn this was my 100th post. It hasn't felt like that many.
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Time flies when you?re having fun!! Always a pleasure!
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Time flies when you?re having fun!! Always a pleasure!
Comment from prettybluebirds
Geez, I was hoping you would somehow put Old Blue back to work. Instead, you gave him a tragic ending. Oh, well. Not every story has a happy ending. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Geez, I was hoping you would somehow put Old Blue back to work. Instead, you gave him a tragic ending. Oh, well. Not every story has a happy ending. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023
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Someone else pointed out that "Wile on the Green" was the same way--with an unfortunate ending. I'm normally not such a wet-blanket because I usually like happy endings to things. These two just happened to turn out that way.
Thanks for the good review, pbb.