Life's Storm
Free verse.20 total reviews
Comment from jacquelyn popp
I really enjoyed reading your poem. The words flowed together well making for an enjoyable read. The imagery you created with your descriptions made me feel as if I was standing there watching the storm. The photo you added was a nice touch and went well with your poem. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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I really enjoyed reading your poem. The words flowed together well making for an enjoyable read. The imagery you created with your descriptions made me feel as if I was standing there watching the storm. The photo you added was a nice touch and went well with your poem. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a fine, imaginative portrayal of what you see in the painting. You made me think of the rock as a steady ship's prow, and your Captain standing firm against all odds. kay
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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This is a fine, imaginative portrayal of what you see in the painting. You made me think of the rock as a steady ship's prow, and your Captain standing firm against all odds. kay
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. Yes, I have to agree with you, I have also had a fascination with the sea, as does my husband. Your poem is very well written. You chose some powerful words that revealed the emotion.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. Yes, I have to agree with you, I have also had a fascination with the sea, as does my husband. Your poem is very well written. You chose some powerful words that revealed the emotion.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are engaging, descriptive and creative. I found these words thought provoking as I thought about the storms of life. The last
line says so much to me. The author's words are intense. The artwork
is awesome and compliments this poem.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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The author's words are engaging, descriptive and creative. I found these words thought provoking as I thought about the storms of life. The last
line says so much to me. The author's words are intense. The artwork
is awesome and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I too, always had a fascination for sea. A metaphor for life, with turbid ebbs and flow. Spent three years floating on dinghies on two oceans in the Navy. Fascinating.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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I too, always had a fascination for sea. A metaphor for life, with turbid ebbs and flow. Spent three years floating on dinghies on two oceans in the Navy. Fascinating.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much
Comment from country ranch writer
The ocean is my friend I could live at the sea forever if I could afford to.
I love watching the dolphins dancing in the moon light as I take in the star shinning so bright over head, meteors spark across the sky and fade out.The fish are in top form tonight skirting the shoreline for good food yo chow don on.great job.
Friday 1/27/2023.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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The ocean is my friend I could live at the sea forever if I could afford to.
I love watching the dolphins dancing in the moon light as I take in the star shinning so bright over head, meteors spark across the sky and fade out.The fish are in top form tonight skirting the shoreline for good food yo chow don on.great job.
Friday 1/27/2023.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Comment from jmdg1954
Your last line "But I feel tired", told me you were in fact writing how I was interpreting your poem, about life.
whipping waves, roller coaster, turbulence, moaning wind...
Excellent post that I'm happy to have read.
John
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Your last line "But I feel tired", told me you were in fact writing how I was interpreting your poem, about life.
whipping waves, roller coaster, turbulence, moaning wind...
Excellent post that I'm happy to have read.
John
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much
Comment from Ricky1024
This was well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
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Ocean Waves plummeting me into an "Unknown Grave"
Effervescent turquoise moans swallow me below.
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This also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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As I await my Ultimate Test of Fate.
Yes, that only now God knows?
Thanks for sharing this and have a great day.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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This was well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
...
Ocean Waves plummeting me into an "Unknown Grave"
Effervescent turquoise moans swallow me below.
...
This also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
As I await my Ultimate Test of Fate.
Yes, that only now God knows?
Thanks for sharing this and have a great day.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much
Comment from karenina
OH, this is very rich. Every line is weighty and has a gravitas about it that holds my attention. Excellent use of alliteration:
"tormenting tornadoes"
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"whipping waves into a wailing frenzy"
I could feel the wind chapping my cheeks, taste the salt on my lips...
Six-worthy on a Friday when I am, alas, out, my friend.
I hope you do very well in this contest!
Karenina
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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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OH, this is very rich. Every line is weighty and has a gravitas about it that holds my attention. Excellent use of alliteration:
"tormenting tornadoes"
and
"whipping waves into a wailing frenzy"
I could feel the wind chapping my cheeks, taste the salt on my lips...
Six-worthy on a Friday when I am, alas, out, my friend.
I hope you do very well in this contest!
Karenina
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Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much.
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Welcome!
Comment from lyenochka
I always loved the sea, too! And I do like the metaphor for the storms of life depicted by 'the turbid ebbs and tides of human misery'
I really liked "Now the I hear the muted hiss of waves
as it calmly hugs the shore"
I can totally understand the final line but I wish for something more powerful than "feel." Maybe something like "Fatigue washes over me." Using a word like "feel" weakens because it is "filtered" through someone else.
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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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I always loved the sea, too! And I do like the metaphor for the storms of life depicted by 'the turbid ebbs and tides of human misery'
I really liked "Now the I hear the muted hiss of waves
as it calmly hugs the shore"
I can totally understand the final line but I wish for something more powerful than "feel." Maybe something like "Fatigue washes over me." Using a word like "feel" weakens because it is "filtered" through someone else.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023
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I will take away 'but' .'I float on fatigue'? it can continue the 'wave' metaphor with the calmer sea.