The Divine Nonsense of Jim Wile
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Bad Guy"A collection of 13 humorous poems
21 total reviews
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
You presented an extremely amusing twist on the dangers of writing in free verse, that what we had come to value must be TOTALLY rejected. As you point out, this may led to suboptimal expression patterns. Surely there should be some tolerence? kay
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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You presented an extremely amusing twist on the dangers of writing in free verse, that what we had come to value must be TOTALLY rejected. As you point out, this may led to suboptimal expression patterns. Surely there should be some tolerence? kay
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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Free verse can occasionally tolerate some rhyming, but the rules for this contest said NO rhyming. Naturally, I tried to get around it.
Comment from Terry Broxson
LOL, You get the last six. Your work here is not only creative on a couple of levels, but it is also very fun! I think you have blended outstanding poetry writing abilities with satire and presentation. Exceptional. Terry.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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LOL, You get the last six. Your work here is not only creative on a couple of levels, but it is also very fun! I think you have blended outstanding poetry writing abilities with satire and presentation. Exceptional. Terry.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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That is a very kind review, Terry. I thank you so much for that and the 6 stars, my friend.
Comment from DragonSkulls
Hahaha. This was genius. Sounds about like stuff I put on here myself. Lol. "He'll hunt you down near and not near." That was hilarious. The whole piece was great. Thanks for the chuckles. Best of luck in the booth. I'll be keeping an eye out for it.
Ron
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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Hahaha. This was genius. Sounds about like stuff I put on here myself. Lol. "He'll hunt you down near and not near." That was hilarious. The whole piece was great. Thanks for the chuckles. Best of luck in the booth. I'll be keeping an eye out for it.
Ron
Comment Written 26-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023
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Thanks for the 6, DS. Thought you might enjoy this one.
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Too funny, friend.
Comment from Mary Shifman
I like your non-rhyming poem. It gave me several good chuckles. I especially like the way you struck out the rhyming and stuck in something else. Very creative. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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I like your non-rhyming poem. It gave me several good chuckles. I especially like the way you struck out the rhyming and stuck in something else. Very creative. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Thanks very much, Mary.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It is a pity that the typical bad guy has been depicted with this image here? Not sure everyone would agree, as there are bad guys in all cultures. I think this could be considered as a racist post and might be offensive to some people. Regards Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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It is a pity that the typical bad guy has been depicted with this image here? Not sure everyone would agree, as there are bad guys in all cultures. I think this could be considered as a racist post and might be offensive to some people. Regards Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Oh, no. I certainly didn't mean to offend anyone! I have no idea who this cartoon character is or what his nationality or race might be. I just liked the heavy-lidded eyes and evil smile.
Comment from karenina
Laugh out loud funny. Your "strike-throughs" are infectiously adorable...I think I'd have the same problem if told I couldn't toss in a rhyme as my muse whispered!
Suddenly every line I type is begging to be rhymed!
(Isn't that always the way?)
Fun and fine and smile-inducing!
Karenina
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Laugh out loud funny. Your "strike-throughs" are infectiously adorable...I think I'd have the same problem if told I couldn't toss in a rhyme as my muse whispered!
Suddenly every line I type is begging to be rhymed!
(Isn't that always the way?)
Fun and fine and smile-inducing!
Karenina
Comment Written 25-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the great review. I'm happy you found it amusing.
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H-I-L-A-R-I-O-U-S!
Comment from royowen
I wonder if the judges will appreciate you sense of humour, I know I certainly do. Heh heh. But great rhyming anyway, (even though it's unofficial) I have a set against those that are biased against it. This is witty and beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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I wonder if the judges will appreciate you sense of humour, I know I certainly do. Heh heh. But great rhyming anyway, (even though it's unofficial) I have a set against those that are biased against it. This is witty and beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Roy. This may get disqualified, but I don't care. It's always fun for me to poke a little fun at free verse.
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I agree, rhyming verse takes skill, not everyone can do it well.
Comment from Brandon Clark
Definitely a clever twist and done very well. Using the strikethrough was another good idea for what your message was. I thought this was very good and good luck in the contest!!
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Definitely a clever twist and done very well. Using the strikethrough was another good idea for what your message was. I thought this was very good and good luck in the contest!!
Comment Written 25-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Thanks, Brandon. I'm just glad they had a strikethrough in the advanced editor! Otherwise, I would be disqualified (probably will anyway!)
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You should be fine, they like to see "witty" and original takes on the prompt as long as it still follows the general guidelines...which is why I liked how you did this one! You'll do great whether you win or not...just keep posting!!
Comment from Douglas Goff
Hilarious. This is a great entry. I'm certain that I shall be voting for you creative unique piece of work.
Thanks for sharing that great big brain of yours!
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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Hilarious. This is a great entry. I'm certain that I shall be voting for you creative unique piece of work.
Thanks for sharing that great big brain of yours!
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Comment Written 25-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks so much, Douglas!
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is so creatively done I would be a foolish person not to give you a six. The text is a great size. The jest is gotten immediately with the first verse of strikethrough words. The overall creative concept for this poem is stellar. The visual fits well. The presentation is well-done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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This is so creatively done I would be a foolish person not to give you a six. The text is a great size. The jest is gotten immediately with the first verse of strikethrough words. The overall creative concept for this poem is stellar. The visual fits well. The presentation is well-done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for the great review and the 6, Sandra. I'm honored.
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I give six stars for writing I wish I had penned. You are welcome. A great poem!