The Spider
The life of a spider is all about spinning.26 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting and well written poem about the life of a spider. I try not to get in their way, but they do spin beautiful webs and catch certain insects in them. That was too good of a picture of the spider. It was so real looking! lol Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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This is a very interesting and well written poem about the life of a spider. I try not to get in their way, but they do spin beautiful webs and catch certain insects in them. That was too good of a picture of the spider. It was so real looking! lol Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Teri, thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. I am glad you enjoyed it. Yes the picture was a perfect fit for the poem. Please take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
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You are so welcome!!!
Comment from Helena Cheu
I really love the lines "wind an weave, twist and twine / row by row, line by line"! The only thing I'd like to point out is that "whom am I" should be "who am I." Generally speaking, who functions as a subject, while whom functions as an object. In the sentence "who am I?", who is the subject therefore the correct word is who and not whom.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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I really love the lines "wind an weave, twist and twine / row by row, line by line"! The only thing I'd like to point out is that "whom am I" should be "who am I." Generally speaking, who functions as a subject, while whom functions as an object. In the sentence "who am I?", who is the subject therefore the correct word is who and not whom.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Helena,
I agree with your advice on wording. Thanks. I will edit asap. Thanks for taking time to read and review my poem. Take care and have a great day.
Comment from Chris Davies
Such a well-written poem! I was caught off guard by the first stanza punctuation, but like the way you carried it off. I may think twice before next destroying a web. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Such a well-written poem! I was caught off guard by the first stanza punctuation, but like the way you carried it off. I may think twice before next destroying a web. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Wow,
A six star review is not easy to gain. Thanks and I am so glad you enjoyed it. It has done well in winning the competition. Spiders rarely get and good reviews. Take care and have a great day.
Cheers,
Barry Penfold.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet, I gave you your 8th vote.
I love to watch spiders spin their web and if I find one in the house I catch it in a glass and deposit it outside.
They are very useful , they eat lots of bugs and vermin.
You penned a lovely poem with lots of descriptive verbs and full of great rhyme.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Ciao mystery poet, I gave you your 8th vote.
I love to watch spiders spin their web and if I find one in the house I catch it in a glass and deposit it outside.
They are very useful , they eat lots of bugs and vermin.
You penned a lovely poem with lots of descriptive verbs and full of great rhyme.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it . Spiders are not really understood by us humans. Take care and have a lovely day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Beautiful poem. Very unique subject which, basically is a reminder that every living thing and their workmanship should be treated with respect. Great reminder for us to appreciate the beauty of nature doing their thing!!
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Beautiful poem. Very unique subject which, basically is a reminder that every living thing and their workmanship should be treated with respect. Great reminder for us to appreciate the beauty of nature doing their thing!!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Mario,
Thanks for taking time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it. Spiders are a bit scary but really do deserve more respect. Anyway, you have a wonderful day and take care.
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Karyn2
This is such a great contest entry for the life of a ...prompt. Your rhyme is so neat and the poem has such a great flow with strong satisfying conclusion. You manage to capture the feeling and movement of the busy spider at work, unraveling web as the poem flows. A terrific write. I don't have a 6 star to offer but this is a really well written poem. I hope you do well.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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This is such a great contest entry for the life of a ...prompt. Your rhyme is so neat and the poem has such a great flow with strong satisfying conclusion. You manage to capture the feeling and movement of the busy spider at work, unraveling web as the poem flows. A terrific write. I don't have a 6 star to offer but this is a really well written poem. I hope you do well.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Karyn,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. I am glad you enjoyed it. The poem eventually won the competion which is always satisfying. Please take care. Have a great day.
Barry Penfold.
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So pleased you did well! There were some terrific entries in that contest and yours was very deserving!
Comment from Nicki Nance
I liked this little snippet of a spider's life. Your rhyming was very clever, and your imagery had wonderful movement in it. I liked the humble sentiment you expressed at the end.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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I liked this little snippet of a spider's life. Your rhyming was very clever, and your imagery had wonderful movement in it. I liked the humble sentiment you expressed at the end.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Nicki,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my entry. I am so glad you enjoyed it. Spiders are often underestimated in the scheme of things.
Take care and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from mermaids
Your use of action words bring the spider to life. Your poetic form brings forth a different viewpoint of the spider. I do not want to harm them after reading your poem, they work hard creating their webs. Excellent theme here for a poem.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Your use of action words bring the spider to life. Your poetic form brings forth a different viewpoint of the spider. I do not want to harm them after reading your poem, they work hard creating their webs. Excellent theme here for a poem.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it. Yes, while it is tempting to destroy a web it is much better if we can leave it in place.
Take care.
Barry Penfold.
Comment from susand3022
Hello Author,
This is pretty good, I liked the imagery you created spinning the web with your spider. "Spin and twirl" "twist and twine" very visual words.
Good choices creating a visual poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Susan :)
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Hello Author,
This is pretty good, I liked the imagery you created spinning the web with your spider. "Spin and twirl" "twist and twine" very visual words.
Good choices creating a visual poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Susan :)
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Susan,
Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review my poem. I am glad you enjoyed it. It was a winner in the end so all is good. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This is really a truly excellent poem, with wonderful thought and great rhythm and rhyme. The pictures illustrates well, also. (A couple of suggestions: Mastermind and passerby are both one world, and it would be Who am I?)
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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This is really a truly excellent poem, with wonderful thought and great rhythm and rhyme. The pictures illustrates well, also. (A couple of suggestions: Mastermind and passerby are both one world, and it would be Who am I?)
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Verna,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. I also thank you for your suggestions. I will make an edit asap. The poem won the day, so I am happy about that .
Please take care and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
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Congratulations on your win!