Arise, Arise
A sliced shirt ok. But no breast fillet.47 total reviews
Comment from Ida T. Johnson
Clever mini horror show enacted on a blood red stage! Great rhyme! I'm a little slow, so had to read twice before I got it! I DO love this but punctuation might add clarity, or is punctuation not used in haiku type poems! Great job, good luck!
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Clever mini horror show enacted on a blood red stage! Great rhyme! I'm a little slow, so had to read twice before I got it! I DO love this but punctuation might add clarity, or is punctuation not used in haiku type poems! Great job, good luck!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
A carefully worded poem which is chillingly succinct. In fact what is unsaid and left incomplete leaves much to the imagination. The best horror is that never quite described.
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A carefully worded poem which is chillingly succinct. In fact what is unsaid and left incomplete leaves much to the imagination. The best horror is that never quite described.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was an excellent contest entry, Everett, with just the right words to pull it off. I know it's not immediately you feel the sting of a cut. Well done, this should do very well. Good luck! :)) Sandra
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That was an excellent contest entry, Everett, with just the right words to pull it off. I know it's not immediately you feel the sting of a cut. Well done, this should do very well. Good luck! :)) Sandra
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
Comment from ArwenE
This poem describes a violent and painful event, specifically, someone being stabbed with a knife and bleeding from the wound. The language used is simple and straight-forward, which effectively conveys the horror of the situation.
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This poem describes a violent and painful event, specifically, someone being stabbed with a knife and bleeding from the wound. The language used is simple and straight-forward, which effectively conveys the horror of the situation.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
Comment from Kaiku
I have to stop laughing so I can give you my stars. Would have been six but they`re all gone. You deserve one of them. This was just too funny. Good luck.
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I have to stop laughing so I can give you my stars. Would have been six but they`re all gone. You deserve one of them. This was just too funny. Good luck.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Yes, that action, ee, would certainly be a horror alert.
Great job with the syllable count per line and the end
rhymes. Your few syllables, as required, told a horrific
story. The color scheme was perfect for your well though
out words.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
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Yes, that action, ee, would certainly be a horror alert.
Great job with the syllable count per line and the end
rhymes. Your few syllables, as required, told a horrific
story. The color scheme was perfect for your well though
out words.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
Comment from karenina
As an RN I've seen victims come into the ER oblivious to their wound...a bit of blood, a torn shirt... and then the horror as they realize the truth of the trauma. Nice 5-7-5. No horror like a knick of reality!
Karenina
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As an RN I've seen victims come into the ER oblivious to their wound...a bit of blood, a torn shirt... and then the horror as they realize the truth of the trauma. Nice 5-7-5. No horror like a knick of reality!
Karenina
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
Comment from Cathy M
This reminds me of the movie: The Menu. Yikes slice and dice. Reminds me of all the slice and dice horror movies. You did a great job of portraying the horror movies. Again, nicely done.
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This reminds me of the movie: The Menu. Yikes slice and dice. Reminds me of all the slice and dice horror movies. You did a great job of portraying the horror movies. Again, nicely done.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
Comment from LJbutterfly
Ouch! Of all the horrifying things that could happen and be written about, how did you ever think of this? It's creative, and super rich in imagery, with a knife, shirt, breast, and blood in just a few words. Best wishes in the contest.
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Ouch! Of all the horrifying things that could happen and be written about, how did you ever think of this? It's creative, and super rich in imagery, with a knife, shirt, breast, and blood in just a few words. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
Comment from nomi338
Yikes! I don't know what that must have felt like, but it could not have been very pleasant. As a teen I engaged in knife play with my buddies, I would up slicing off the tip of my left thumb. It grew back, but the trauma of seeing what could happen, cured me of my fascination of messing around with knives forever.
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Yikes! I don't know what that must have felt like, but it could not have been very pleasant. As a teen I engaged in knife play with my buddies, I would up slicing off the tip of my left thumb. It grew back, but the trauma of seeing what could happen, cured me of my fascination of messing around with knives forever.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2023
