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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Great artwork for this poem. The artwork has a mysterious tone to it as does the poem and the idea of one sided love. Thank you for sharing this poem with us.
pulling towars deep oceans (towards??)
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Great artwork for this poem. The artwork has a mysterious tone to it as does the poem and the idea of one sided love. Thank you for sharing this poem with us.
pulling towars deep oceans (towards??)
Comment Written 18-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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I fixed the typo, thanks!
Barbara,
Thank you very much for your time and exceptional review. Happy Holidays!!!
Gypsy Sensei
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
This a very good poem. Your written words make us feel the rippling tides of sadness or happiness when they touch a person's soul. If it is one-sided there is uncertainty.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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This a very good poem. Your written words make us feel the rippling tides of sadness or happiness when they touch a person's soul. If it is one-sided there is uncertainty.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and exceptional review. Happy Holidays!!!
Gypsy Sensei
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your Tanka poem - good picture presentation and word flow - might want to use toward or towards - both correct, Maybe tide(s) up for better flow? (Ocean tides are up, vs ocean tide up? What you have is okay too.) Poem telling of one-sided love - certainly will lead to ambiguity - a very common experience in those kind of relationships - have been in a few of those myself lol. Good word count too. Good Job.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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I like your Tanka poem - good picture presentation and word flow - might want to use toward or towards - both correct, Maybe tide(s) up for better flow? (Ocean tides are up, vs ocean tide up? What you have is okay too.) Poem telling of one-sided love - certainly will lead to ambiguity - a very common experience in those kind of relationships - have been in a few of those myself lol. Good word count too. Good Job.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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I checked the tanka again and i like it the way it is.
Thank you very much for your time and exceptional review. Happy Holidays!!!
Gypsy Sensei
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Sounds good. 'toward' was spelled wrong I see you caught it. Good Job. Hug. AP
Comment from jaded831
Your poem is truly a reflection of one-sided love. If love is not returned one feels like they are drowning in emotion. I reread your poem more than once, each time grasping deeper meaning. Truly a mark of a great poet.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Your poem is truly a reflection of one-sided love. If love is not returned one feels like they are drowning in emotion. I reread your poem more than once, each time grasping deeper meaning. Truly a mark of a great poet.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and exceptional review. Happy Holidays!!!
Gypsy Sensei
Comment from Ricky1024
Unfortunately, I've been though this many times and even recently.
Thanks God there was never any connection but she was planning it that way.
Yes, I helped a sick woman but now that page hath been turned and the contents?
Hopefully burning and buried.
Well written and have a Blessed Sabbath Sunday.
Doctor Ricky1024
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Unfortunately, I've been though this many times and even recently.
Thanks God there was never any connection but she was planning it that way.
Yes, I helped a sick woman but now that page hath been turned and the contents?
Hopefully burning and buried.
Well written and have a Blessed Sabbath Sunday.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment Written 18-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Blessed, Sabbath Sunday!! Thank you very much for your time and exceptional review.
Gypsy Sensei
Comment from Carlos' girl
Another lesson in inscrutable obscurity from the master. As usual Im thoroughly confounded... What better topic than ambiguity in love? Its perfect for a tanka.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Another lesson in inscrutable obscurity from the master. As usual Im thoroughly confounded... What better topic than ambiguity in love? Its perfect for a tanka.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and exceptional review. Happy Holidays!!!
Gypsy Sensei
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Have a wonderful holiday Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
I really like the deep oceans of ambiguity! That's a powerful metaphor. And when love is only one-sided then it feels like one is separated by oceans.
Did you mean towards?
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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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I really like the deep oceans of ambiguity! That's a powerful metaphor. And when love is only one-sided then it feels like one is separated by oceans.
Did you mean towards?
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Comment Written 18-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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Yes, I meant towards, it's a typo, Roy and others told me too. It's fixed (*=*)
Thank you, Big Sister!
Love you,
Marival ❤️
Comment from Karyn2
You are so creative Gypsy! Words are truly your gift. I just love "deep oceans of ambiguity!!" Those words are stunning and so emotive, deep and soulful. A little edit "towar(d)s" and I wondered if "tide up" was a deliberate poetic choice or if it might have been "tied up" ? A great poem nonetheless!!
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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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You are so creative Gypsy! Words are truly your gift. I just love "deep oceans of ambiguity!!" Those words are stunning and so emotive, deep and soulful. A little edit "towar(d)s" and I wondered if "tide up" was a deliberate poetic choice or if it might have been "tied up" ? A great poem nonetheless!!
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Comment Written 18-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2022
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I fixed the typo, thanks!
Thank you very much for your time and exceptional review. Happy Holidays!!!
Gypsy Sensei