Shades of Empty
A rewrite of Sound of Silence by Simon and GarfunkelGarfun21 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
Your new lyrics sounded really great as I sang along. Cynical and dark, but fun nonetheless.
Sending you my best today as always and my very best for the upcoming contest. (Thank you also for the video.) Blessings,
Sally :))
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2022
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Your new lyrics sounded really great as I sang along. Cynical and dark, but fun nonetheless.
Sending you my best today as always and my very best for the upcoming contest. (Thank you also for the video.) Blessings,
Sally :))
Comment Written 14-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2022
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Thank you Sally, I really appreciate your review and comments.
Smiles and Merry Christmas
Comment from estory
I think it has an abstract expressionist feel, capturing the feeling of loss we get when confronted with depression or anxiety or death or pain. The emptiness keeps underscoring each stanza and its portraits of despairing moments in life. estory
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2022
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I think it has an abstract expressionist feel, capturing the feeling of loss we get when confronted with depression or anxiety or death or pain. The emptiness keeps underscoring each stanza and its portraits of despairing moments in life. estory
Comment Written 14-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2022
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Thank you for a great review. That is what I was going for.
I wish you a wonderful Christmas season!
Comment from jake cosmos aller
great take on this classic song I loved the following
With troubled thoughts I drift soul-jaded
Through halls where sound has faded
Under halos of the moonlight
I clutch my cloak around me in the night
Then my ears are pierced by the scream of a dying child
The echoes pile
Around the shades of empty
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2022
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great take on this classic song I loved the following
With troubled thoughts I drift soul-jaded
Through halls where sound has faded
Under halos of the moonlight
I clutch my cloak around me in the night
Then my ears are pierced by the scream of a dying child
The echoes pile
Around the shades of empty
Comment Written 13-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2022
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Thank you for a great review. I appreciate you pointing out the verse you liked best.
":-)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is one of my favourite songs and brings back lots of memories for me. Your version has a similar sombre theme and I enjoyed your parody here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2022
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This is one of my favourite songs and brings back lots of memories for me. Your version has a similar sombre theme and I enjoyed your parody here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2022
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Thank you Dolly. It is a favoiite for me as well. It was fun to try to rewrite my own version.
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Thank you Dolly. It is a favoiite for me as well. It was fun to try to rewrite my own version.
Comment from karenina
I am a huge S&G fan and you've done a knock down drag out super job of rewriting the lyrics and creating an entire updated version of the somehow profound sadness I felt when I listened to this as a much younger person.
"Seize my hand that I might feel you
Let me understand the real you"
Who hasn't been THERE?
Wow.
Karenina
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2022
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I am a huge S&G fan and you've done a knock down drag out super job of rewriting the lyrics and creating an entire updated version of the somehow profound sadness I felt when I listened to this as a much younger person.
"Seize my hand that I might feel you
Let me understand the real you"
Who hasn't been THERE?
Wow.
Karenina
Comment Written 13-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2022
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Thank you Karenina, I am really pleased with your outstanding comments. I'm so glad you liked it.
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I think I still know every one of their songs by heart!
Comment from royowen
I think you've written some superb lyrics, you say they don't mean anything, but if you read the book of Ecclesiastes in the Old Testament you'll see what I mean. It's true that life has little meaning to it, but that's not quite true, just the way we live it has no meaning, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo a (rewirt) rewrite (in the title)
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2022
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I think you've written some superb lyrics, you say they don't mean anything, but if you read the book of Ecclesiastes in the Old Testament you'll see what I mean. It's true that life has little meaning to it, but that's not quite true, just the way we live it has no meaning, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo a (rewirt) rewrite (in the title)
Comment Written 13-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2022
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Thank you. I just didn't want anyone to be upset if they didn't understand what I was trying to say. I appreciate a great review.
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Well done
Comment from Karyn2
What a fabulous song to rewrite! Yes the melody is truly haunting, beautiful and ebbs and flows. You know, the whole time I was reading I thought each of your lines were sheer brilliance in metaphor and description and emotion and when I read your notes at the end about not really making sense it was funny because, I can't tell you exactly what you wrote about but it was so deep and sincere that the whole time I felt a deep connection and understanding. Almost as though the emotional connection and tone was what created the understanding for the reader. Clearly there is a sense of foreboding at a troubled world, struggle to be silent or wanting to speak out and yet feeling helpless or empty. I think this fabulous for its mystery, tone and expression.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2022
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What a fabulous song to rewrite! Yes the melody is truly haunting, beautiful and ebbs and flows. You know, the whole time I was reading I thought each of your lines were sheer brilliance in metaphor and description and emotion and when I read your notes at the end about not really making sense it was funny because, I can't tell you exactly what you wrote about but it was so deep and sincere that the whole time I felt a deep connection and understanding. Almost as though the emotional connection and tone was what created the understanding for the reader. Clearly there is a sense of foreboding at a troubled world, struggle to be silent or wanting to speak out and yet feeling helpless or empty. I think this fabulous for its mystery, tone and expression.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2022
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Karyn, Thank you for a wonderful review. I appreciate all your comment and the six star is especially rewarding.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
The original song and tune are very well known. It is however helpful to have a recording to compare.The chorus is well done. There is an overall sad, elegiac tone.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2022
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The original song and tune are very well known. It is however helpful to have a recording to compare.The chorus is well done. There is an overall sad, elegiac tone.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2022
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Thank you Sarah, I appreciate the review and nice comments.
:)
Comment from jessizero
I really loved the original song, but this re-write was beautiful, as well. I felt it so much. "Shades of empty" was a haunting phrase. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2022
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I really loved the original song, but this re-write was beautiful, as well. I felt it so much. "Shades of empty" was a haunting phrase. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2022
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Thank you Jess. I really appreciate the review and nice comments.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did an awesome job with your contest entry, Mystery
Author. First of all, the picture was a perfect pairing--it's
haunting like the original song and your re-write. I remember
the song well. I played it with the volume down low and read
your poem as it played. Your words flowed smoothly to the
beat. I liked the word choices, the rhymes, and the message. I
believed each person would interpret the original and now yours
as they fit in their lives.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2022
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You did an awesome job with your contest entry, Mystery
Author. First of all, the picture was a perfect pairing--it's
haunting like the original song and your re-write. I remember
the song well. I played it with the volume down low and read
your poem as it played. Your words flowed smoothly to the
beat. I liked the word choices, the rhymes, and the message. I
believed each person would interpret the original and now yours
as they fit in their lives.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2022
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I love your review comments. I'm so pleased you liked the picture I chose, and felt the re-write was haunting. I always loved the song and found it mysterious. It was a fun contest. I hope there will be more like this. :)