Heart Crafted Poems - 2023
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Love at First Sight"Musing of an old man
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Comment from Kayte Ray
Great job with the rhyme scheme here.
A wonderfully written poem that promotes the idea and concept of love a soul mate. Well written and beautifully presented.
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Great job with the rhyme scheme here.
A wonderfully written poem that promotes the idea and concept of love a soul mate. Well written and beautifully presented.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
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Kayte, thank you!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful and heartfelt love sonnet you have penned for the contest about your wife. You used very loving and good words with very good imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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This is a very beautiful and heartfelt love sonnet you have penned for the contest about your wife. You used very loving and good words with very good imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
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Thanks Teri!🙏🙏
Comment from Tom Horonzy
a trifling with Shakespearean sonnets. Well done. ....................................................................................................................................................
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a trifling with Shakespearean sonnets. Well done. ....................................................................................................................................................
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
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Smiles back and thanks
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine love poem and I enjoyed your well chosen words, metre and rhyme.
This line is out of metre
(indUCED me TO ASKing you to take a stroll).
I suggest:
Induced me, now together on a stroll.
Love Dolly x
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A fine love poem and I enjoyed your well chosen words, metre and rhyme.
This line is out of metre
(indUCED me TO ASKing you to take a stroll).
I suggest:
Induced me, now together on a stroll.
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
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Yes you are correct, I erred and changed the original by taking Some bad advice In a previous comment. Thank yoU!
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It all works well now! A fine poem, love Dolly x
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
A sincerely felt and well expressed poem. The picture complements the text! A nicely written poem and a tribute to a life long partnership! A positive start to a New Year!
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A sincerely felt and well expressed poem. The picture complements the text! A nicely written poem and a tribute to a life long partnership! A positive start to a New Year!
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
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Thank you Sarah, I am richly blessed 🙏
Comment from Sally Law
I hope you win the contest with this beautifully penned and illustrated offering. How blessed you are to have such a love and life! Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal :))
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I hope you win the contest with this beautifully penned and illustrated offering. How blessed you are to have such a love and life! Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal :))
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
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Hi Sal, thank you! yes I am grateful.
Comment from Jim Wile
Very nice sonnet in iambic pentameter. The rhyming was excellent as well as the meter. One small suggestion, though: If you phrased the 4th line as "induced my asking you to take a stroll," it would keep the iambic meter in place. Other than that, a very beautiful and heartfelt poem about your beloved wife.
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Very nice sonnet in iambic pentameter. The rhyming was excellent as well as the meter. One small suggestion, though: If you phrased the 4th line as "induced my asking you to take a stroll," it would keep the iambic meter in place. Other than that, a very beautiful and heartfelt poem about your beloved wife.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
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Jim, thank you a very good catch!
Comment from susand3022
Ohhh! J, my heartstrings have been plucked. I wish I was her... that woman in the poem. Why couldn't I have found a man like that who would have felt that way about me? I read these things and I'm so happy for all these brass rings that have been scattered around. All you hear about are the unhappy endings. It's nice to hear about the brass rings. :)
Have a great day.
Thanks for plucking at my heartstrings.
Susan :)
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Ohhh! J, my heartstrings have been plucked. I wish I was her... that woman in the poem. Why couldn't I have found a man like that who would have felt that way about me? I read these things and I'm so happy for all these brass rings that have been scattered around. All you hear about are the unhappy endings. It's nice to hear about the brass rings. :)
Have a great day.
Thanks for plucking at my heartstrings.
Susan :)
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
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Susan, thank you! I am very grateful for my mate! I know it is special.
Comment from royowen
What a beautiful love sonnet, written as I imagine Shakespeare would have approved, just to think he has inspired many lovers to write so eloquently and so well Jim, this is a wonderful love gift, nicely done, blessings Roy
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What a beautiful love sonnet, written as I imagine Shakespeare would have approved, just to think he has inspired many lovers to write so eloquently and so well Jim, this is a wonderful love gift, nicely done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023
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Thank you, good catch I missed this one.
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Welcome Jim.