It's The House
An old bush cabin inspired this15 total reviews
Comment from Barbara Peabody Pouliot
I really enjoyed this. It took me to a place, I often day dream about. Please do not cry about memories, they are a cherished treasure of our journey that lead us to here.
Well unless they were horrible, I guess. But in spite of that the journey took us to where we are now. Thank you for sharing. I truly wish you would add color and some illustration.
Good Luck
Write On
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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I really enjoyed this. It took me to a place, I often day dream about. Please do not cry about memories, they are a cherished treasure of our journey that lead us to here.
Well unless they were horrible, I guess. But in spite of that the journey took us to where we are now. Thank you for sharing. I truly wish you would add color and some illustration.
Good Luck
Write On
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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You must understand, we men are a challenged. This one in particular. I'm smart enough to get on fanstory but when it comes to including a picture, I'm specially challenged. And my major source of brains, my wife wasn't here to post the picture. Sorry about that. Thank you for the very complimentary review.
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We woman are also, speaking for myself,lol
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a beautifully worded rhyming poem about a homeplace. The text is a nice size for reading. The verses each contain a good detail about the speaker's life within those walls.
However, the grayness for the background and no visual makes the poem seem sad rather than grateful for having a good life in this humble home. I would add a more cheerful color to the background. To find the images I want. I type this into my search engine Free photos of (_________). I download it to my computer and upload it here. Just remember to use the word free and you will not be breaking copyrights. Sadly, people will by-pass this poem because you have nothing to draw them in. The visual and color draws them to your writing and your wonderful poem makes them stay. This is a good poem.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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This is a beautifully worded rhyming poem about a homeplace. The text is a nice size for reading. The verses each contain a good detail about the speaker's life within those walls.
However, the grayness for the background and no visual makes the poem seem sad rather than grateful for having a good life in this humble home. I would add a more cheerful color to the background. To find the images I want. I type this into my search engine Free photos of (_________). I download it to my computer and upload it here. Just remember to use the word free and you will not be breaking copyrights. Sadly, people will by-pass this poem because you have nothing to draw them in. The visual and color draws them to your writing and your wonderful poem makes them stay. This is a good poem.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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What a complimentary review. Now I must make a confession. My computer skills are just below those of our cat, and we all know cats are cuddly but intellectually they are morons. By the same token, they are ahead of me.
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I understand. Try the steps I mentioned as practice before you try uploading here. If you need more detailed steps send me a message and I will send them to you.
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Thank you, Sandra. Normally, I have my grandson nearby and he provides all the computer assistance I need. Today he wasn't here. Have a great day.
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Ask him when he comes about downloading and uploading. The young are computer natives.
Comment from Sally Law
Hello p, Bob! Sweet poem of the things that captured us then and now. We moved a lot growing up because my parents had a troubled marriage. My family is what I miss most. The houses and wealth are long gone. Thank you for sharing your experience.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal :))
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Hello p, Bob! Sweet poem of the things that captured us then and now. We moved a lot growing up because my parents had a troubled marriage. My family is what I miss most. The houses and wealth are long gone. Thank you for sharing your experience.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal :))
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Sally, your reviews are always appreciated and generally way too kind. I really relate to your second last sentence. Our wealth is also long gone. Have a great week, you sure have kicked mine off well.
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Most welcome, Bob. Blessings to all the Cullens! Sal XOs
Comment from GWHARGIS
I like how the house is your physical connection to the past and the trigger for the memories of good times. The rhyme scheme was simple yet effective. Well written and very relatable. Gretchen
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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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I like how the house is your physical connection to the past and the trigger for the memories of good times. The rhyme scheme was simple yet effective. Well written and very relatable. Gretchen
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Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Gretchen for taking the time to review my post. I really do appreciate your comment.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, It's the House, brings the readers to this house which, although small, holds worlds of memories that reside here and follow us all our lives.
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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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This poem, It's the House, brings the readers to this house which, although small, holds worlds of memories that reside here and follow us all our lives.
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Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to review my work. I really appreciate your giving me time
