Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Excellent

I find this to be moving slowly at the moment, mainly because of the style of writing. e.g. you trail out the heaing of the three women's neck by lengthy repetition of the description. I think you need to find some way of holding the atention of the reader if you want to maintain such slow progress. Kate xx

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2022

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022

Thank you for the review.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Yay! The healing is starting and they all seem to have a greater understanding of what happened to them all. Thanks for the mention and so glad you researched more about traducianism! By the way, how many more chapters?
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Brother James in a past life.? (should have end quotes. Did you mean to end with a period or question mark?)

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 Comment Written 19-Oct-2022

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022

Thank you for your observant review. There are possibly 2 more chapters, to the labyrinth and to stand in the steeple. In reality, standing in the spots everyone else had stood, where the 2 ley lines crossed, was very healing for me and my friend, Sally Ann (stage name...Cordelia). We just felt balanced.

reply by lyenochka on 19-Oct-2022

Cool that you could relay that in the book! Be sure the post the last chapter on a Saturday or Sunday!!

reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022

Thank you for the heads-up